Running From Lions - Comments

This is so wonderfully emotive. I enjoy the realistic notes of Jack in real life that you have put, especially the love of Home Alone though haven't mentioned any of the band or such yet. Because of that, I feel as if this could go either way in terms of story, which is good because it leaves me guessing!

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I really don't listen to ATL or any of that genre's bands haha so.. I'm not really sure who everyone is haha but nonetheless I found that by just reading the first chapter it was very interesting. I have to admit, when he said "Thursday" I thought of Buddy the Elf when he's all excited to be going on that date with Jovie. But that's just me... I love the detail in your story; not too many people are gifted as to put detail in their story... me being one of them ha. You built up the story even though it was the first chapter; I feel like I really know the characters. I have subscribed and I await the next chapter:)

So, I’m really digging Jack’s personality. You did a good job capturing it correctly. And the fact that the main character’s name is Thursday makes me think of the Adam’s Family and I really hope that’s going to play into the rest of this story. I’m definitely going to read this. Keep up the good work!

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Since there's only one chapter, I don't have too much to go off of. Obviously, between the title and character, this is an ATL story of some sort. I think you've captured Jack's personality well and I'm interested to see where this is going.