Meet Me on Thames St. - Comments

I’m here as the new host for ‘Another Song Contest’.

The concept of this was really interesting, even more so with it taking place in the span of a day. I liked how Frank and Gerard met because it showed a lot of kindness in Gerard. It became more poignant when Gerard confessed to why he did it. Which was also nice because it helped me know Mikey better, too, and I thought that was a really nice touch. The chemistry between Frank and Gerard was really sweet. Definitely a bit “love at first sight”, but sweet nonetheless. Especially with how they kind of gravitated towards each other after Gerard left Frank at the beach. It added to their relationship and made it deeper.

I’ll admit, I did think the pacing was a bit quick. I’m not so much of a cynic that I didn’t believe in their natural chemistry, but things moved so quickly. It got very intense very fast, which was mildly overwhelming for me as a reader. I did like that you acknowledged how freaky it was for them too, though. Because it did make it easier for me to understand how monumental it was, knowing that Frank didn’t believe in love at first sight and Gerard was scared of this feeling.

Technicality wise, I feel like you used the same adjectives too much. The more you did it, the more it stood out to me and the more distracting it became. It eventually reached a point where you used the same descriptor so often within such a short vicinity that it would totally ruin the flow for me. The ones that stood out the most were when you referred to Frank and Gerard as “the guitarist” and “the artist”, or when you called Gerard “the red-head”. But you would describe smiles, laughs, physical features, and just overall noises as ‘sexy’ or ‘gorgeous’ a lot. It was repetitive and very distracting because I feel like you could have definitely described these things differently. There was a point in chapter six where you wrote “gorgeous length” twice in the span of like one sentence. So I would definitely recommend reading it over and using different adjectives or describing things differently.

Other than that, I thought this was a cute and well-written story so good job.

I think the lighthouse was a wonderful idea and that no one would have ever thought of that and it is a very romantic thing to use. The idea of having any kind of romantic or even sexual date or even just a quick get together is making me think why didn't I think of that.

I would love for this to go on forever and end in a semi-happy or even happy ending and I can't wait to read more.

One more final thing I think that if you updated this on mychemicalromancefanfition everyone would be happy.

The lighthouse, It's so damn cute and romantic!! Frank and Gerard are fucking made for each other, I swear. They're perfect and this is just so... Wow. Words elude me at this moment.

Okayokay, I need to chill because you've left us hanging-- I can see their sex being sooo sweet yet so damned hot. I can't wait. =D

Any ending is perfect for this, but please don't let it be the depressing one ;-; I don't think I'd deal with that ;-; (forever would be great, too ;D)

This is so sad and so brilliant and so emotional and-- you play with my emotions in all the best ways possible. Your talent leaves me in awe and fucking wonder. How you do it, I'll never know, but I'm so grateful for it. <3

You are so fucking romantic and I LOVE IT because I am too awe I can't express enough love for this in words omg
I think maybe because this story is just so romantically impossible you should stick to the super happy ending but idk like... we know g but we dont know frnk and oh i dont know what im saying... just make them happy and in love forever and ever

pd: ily ♥

i vote for forever,but if not il go with the super happy ending :D

I vote for a happy ending!!!

i vote that it goes on forever! you could make it domestic I guess..

IF NOT tHEN THE SUPER HAPPY ENDING

YES!! I can't wait for what's to come, man I'm glad Frank found him! -happy sobs- Mikey ;-; that broke my heart a little and oh wow is Gerard's dad an ass

Oh my god, YES this is so good please keep writing I was so sad because i thought it was the end but OH I can't waiittt

GERARD WHAT THE HELL

I'm sorry it took me a while to comment, I've just had a hectic Mock Week and a busy weekend, but now It's gone and I actually have time to draw and read and write and whatever.

This was so sad but so beautiful ;-; I know this Isn't the end because there's part II coming, (yay!) but wow, that's a painful ending.

Good luck with the contest, I think this definitely deserves to win, I loved every single bit. I seriously cannot wait to read the second part once It's up!!<3

Omg I don't think you understand how much I love this

noooo please dont end it there its to sad :(

That was beautiful. What a perfect date and I seriously cannot wait for what's to come -- but please don't make it sad! D'= I think I might just die a little. ;-; <3

SIMS REFERENCE

please don't make this sad please please please im begging you

I only just read this, and so far it's amazing. I can just picture everything in my mind! I can't wait to read more!

Lizzy, you are going to break my heart. Again, I might add. Because while this is so, so fucking adorable right now (like Gee calling Frank sugar? Seriously one of my favorite things), I know that this is going to get so, so sad and that you're pretty well going to rip my heart out in the most lovely way. So while I am eagerly anticipating the rest of this story and want to see how it all connects back to that water bottle from the beginning (I hope it's going to), I'm also frightened because it's going to be absolutely heartbreaking.

What I'm saying is, your writing, as always, is absolutely fabulous and gorgeous and at the same time, even when it's fluffy, it's a little heartbreaking, because I would die to have a day like Frank and Gee at this point. Essentially, this story is beautiful and I'm sure that even while you're ripping out our hearts, it's going to continue to be beautiful. <3

OH MY GOD THIS IS SO CUTE I'M SO THANKFUL I CLICKED ON THIS
this makes me so happy

I was grinning throughout, oh my gosh this is just perfect. The way you write is... Well you already know how much I adore your writing ;)

I got a shout-out?? Heck yeah! It's always a pleasure commenting. It's like a good deed for those who deserve it, idk.

Eager for the next parts! I can't wait to see how their little date goes ;D <3

@ ShotToRemember
I MEAN, YEAH, OF COURSE YOU GOT A SHOUT-OUT!!! You helped me tremendously, seriously, more than you know, without your input I seriously would be lost in the dark without any source of light trying to figure out where to go next. Thank you so much <3