It's obvious from the beginning of the story that Emile is not doing fine and that something is wrong with her. I can even say that she seems depress, and I want to know why. You managed to make the first chapter a mystery and I love that. Her attitude towards her mother, and the flashbacks about a funeral (which I am dying to know whose funeral was it), and the ones with her "brother" which we don't know nothing about, makes the first chapter very mysterious and very interesting. Each situations drew me more and more in reading.
I'm not one to read much high school stories, but this one seems very interesting that I'll subscribe to see where you take it. You have a great writing style. Some commas are missing here and there, but nothing major that didn't distracted me from reading.
This sounds so interesting! I love reading stories that don't tell you everything at first. I like the sense of mystery. I can't wait to see where this goes :)
I'm not one to read much high school stories, but this one seems very interesting that I'll subscribe to see where you take it. You have a great writing style. Some commas are missing here and there, but nothing major that didn't distracted me from reading.
Update soon!