Angels Lie - Comments

This was an amazing chapter. I loved all of it. How Bert was having that internal conflict and everything around it. You write amazingly. I actually read that twice, because I'm that cool. And I can't wait to see where this story goes :)

I love the conflict Bert is going through internally.
It is written so well. I know I said that before, but you have written it in a way so that the reader has a clear understanding of his thought process.
It also makes Bert and Gerard's "relationship" more interesting.
I also loved how you described the cherry bombs and incorportaed the anacedote into your writing, the heart being like a bomb etc.
It makes Bert more human...in a weird way, having the experiances that they had.
I love the depth to this story.
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Awh - Gee's so fucked.

So's Bert for the record, there's no way he can pretend for long. It'll just have to come true.

I apologize in advance for the shitty comment. :tehe:
First of all :cheese: holy shit I have no idea why I've never read
any of your stories because this is amazing.

Ungrateful prick, Meta-Bert echoed in his head. Real Bert just apologized, and sunk back into a corner, watching his project wander off to get a drink. Meta-Bert continued to talk, though. You have to watch for him – remember you don’t know when – or if – you’ll be able to save him. And if you don’t, think of how pissed He will be.
I love the interactions between Meta-Bert and Real Bert, and you just captured his conflict in general perfectly. Also the little annoyance Bert has for Gerard is wonderful.

Wow I suck sorry but I warned you about the shitty comment from the beggining. :XD I hope you continue this, because the whole story and the concept itself is to perfect to give up on.

This is really awesome.
I like how the mass of lies are described as "a black sea" I think that is a very clever use of words.
Also the conflict you describe going on in Bert is just amazing, and the situation you have put the characters in is very clever, slightly amusing and has a lot of potential.
It's really great Kor!
:arms

Let me start off by saying that I thought the title was so... remarkable, for lack of a better word. I also loved the layout x)

The first paragraph was just... ugh, I can't even think of a proper word, so I'll go with flawless. :cheese:
And this line There was something about immortality that was so unromantic.. Geeze. It makes you start thinking and start wondering what exactly this job was (or at least it was like that for me).

This was just too good for words. I actually had to go back and re-read it, because the first time it just confused me so much. This sounds weird, but the stories that make you think and confuse you at first tend to be the best ones. :shifty
I like... seriously doubt that made sense, but anyway.

This deserves a way better "review" then the crap I'm doing, but I seriously thought that was flawless. And that last line... god. Even though I've already used the word flawless like 5 times in this comment, I thought the ending line truly was utterly perfect.
U haz mad skillz. xD

This is so good! I'm in love. I really like how you've shaped your characters, it's interesting and very different. And I have no clue what's going to happen next, which for me is extremely awesome.

Keep writing more please? :)

Oh.my.god.
This is so fantastic!.

And I'm not just saying that either. I love this and the way Bert is so fucking ticked off, but he still tries to save Gee. This'll be great. I love the inner conflict thats taking over Bert, and I love the fact that he's torn by his own lies and how the mirror the lies he's faced his whole life.

Can't WAIT for more. :]

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Gerard Way/Bert McCracken
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