Our Lady of Sorrows - Comments

@ amoraforever
thank you :)

I enjoyed reading this story :) i look forward to reading more of your work!

@ amoraforever
thanks :) some people can be stubborn, I had the idea of a nearish death experience from the way begging

Finally! I like the way that you made her see reason. took awhile but was clever!

Finally! I like the way that you made her see reason. took awhile but was clever!

0.0 eppp!

@ amoraforever
it gets better I promise

:(

im in tears! I really hope she changes her mind. I have a feeling she would be a wonderful mamma!

@ amoraforever
Just have to wait and find out! Sneak peak; shes gonna have the baby in the next chapter

I realy want her to be convinced to keep her rights as the mamma! hopefully Gees mamma talks to her.

The story is decent enough, with a decent enough plot, although there are some issues you should look out for. First of all, you should probably format the 'text messages' differently since it's not abundantly clear what parts are the text messages. Second, you do have some spelling errors throughout the story, like putting tired instead of tried or your instead of you're. So look through it again for those.

Also, you need to delete the 'author's note' chapter. As stated in the story guidelines, only actual chapters of a story can be posted as a chapter. Author's notes are in violation of that. So for that part all you need to do is delete that chapter.

@ Gloria9002
thank you, I had my things taken away from me that why i couldnt post, but I will finish this, no worries

Cliffhanger... this is a good story. PLease continue writing! Y'know, only if you wanna, cuz its ur story, and, yea.. Sorry :3

How did you meet Gerard?
Not by having amazing bathroom sex, that's for sure xD
Gawd, Gerard told people. I'd freak out, cry, and probably call my mom to pick me up like holey balls xD
I'm wicked excited for more<3

@ amanda9224
How can't I be into it? It's just so amazing and just Ughh.

@ bird brains
haha I like how into it you are :) I'm considering throwing in a plot twist just for the hell of it

Awh. Gerard was so awkward and Liz was enjoying it but she made time. It's so adorable and I just can't even. I'm so surprised Gerard goes to school - he got her drinks and damnnnnnn.

@ bird brains
Who wouldn't make time for Gerard asswhole or nerd. He is the Queen of sass and sexiness

@ amanda9224
:o
she'll make time o.o
[because even asshole Gerard is amazing and I'd make time for him anydayyyyy c;]