Snow - Comments

@ Am.I.Pretty.Yet!?

Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it. I'm not exactly sure by what you mean about the first sentence, but I'll definitely go over it. And, technically, you are right about the "we lost power" thing. I'll fix that. Thanks.

Well, I quite enjoyed this piece. It was very eloquent and beautiful. I appreciated it. The first sentence feels like it dose't really seem to flow to me I think that could be fixed easily. I like this guy's self-reflection. I think my favorite parts are both in the first paragraph. I particularly like " My heart throbs, but it feels heavy, as if the muscle is having trouble doing its usual function of pumping my blood." As well that you said "the meteorological conditions". I find myself wondering was this a young love or older? Perhaps they were young and he still mourns for her after all this time? lol because when it's love, it's love. He says "we lost power" but to me it seemed he lived alone.

@ WholeLottaARTTM

Thank you. I'm glad you like it.

I love your writing style. This is just a beautiful story.

Thank you. This is written in a guy's POV (though it is never actually stated). I was think about continuing it, but it will be a while before I end up posting it.

You're really lucky that you get snow! It hasn't been any colder than the low fifties here in Florida v.v I really like your vocabulary too. I can totally relate to your character about reading too. I really hope you decide to continue this because I want to know who this red haired chick is c: