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I really enjoyed this story. :) I was surprised she was upset because of a break up but given long they'd been dating and such, I'm not surprised. By surprised i mean, I just thought it would be something else...

Anyway, I really like how you wrote these two characters. I have to say, it's impressive that Josh just left so quickly. That's really sweet.

This is such an interesting concept for a story - I have never read anything like this before. It really reminds me of that older song "Lips of an Angel" if you remember that. I feel bad that Hayley's relationship is less than satisfactory for her, but I also feel bad for the anonymous caller that clearly has feeling for her that he's unable to express.
And then the reveal that the not-so-anonymous caller was Josh! I was not expecting that! That was a great twist for this.

This is so great. You did such a good job holding the reveal until the end, and it is seriously, seriously adorable.
Awesome job!

OH MY GOD WTF. JOSH.
Woah. I'll have to sit down and re-evaluate my life after this plot twist.
I loved the Best Thing (That Never Happened) references in this. The chorus definitely describes the end of their relationship.
But seriously, this was amazing.

I LOVED THIS AND HAVE ALWAYS SHIPPED IT! PARAMORE AND YMAS WERE THE FIRST BANDS I STARTED LISTENING TO AND NO MATTER WHAT EVEN NOW HAYLEY AND JOSH WOULD BE PERFECT NAW SON.

aaaaAAAAWWWW YESSSS

this seriously ripped me up and then it got 100000x better yes yes yes and nope chad can gtfo because i don't need him and hayley SURE AS HELL don't need him hmph. wHO DOES HE THINK HE IS.

"Then he told me he never should've been with me in the first place."

YOU LITLLE FUCK NO I WILL RIP HIS THROAT OUT AND THEN I'LL LET MISTER SIR HERE HANDLE THE REST OF IT BECAUSE NO HE IS D E A D. I HATE HIM YOU ARE DEAD TO US ALL GILBERT. YOU REALLY ARE.

no hayley sweetie he's not saying it to make you feel better no he's saying it because it's the truth shh shh baby girl it's okay and he knows it's okay and yes anD HE LOVES HER AND SHE LOVES HIM TOO WHOA WHOA WHOA THE ADORABLE IS STRONG I LOVE IT.

"It was real and there was no reason for me to ruin it." LOVE THAT TOO. loveitloveitloveit.

THIS ENDED SO ADORABLY AND THE REVEAL I KNEW IT WOULD BE SWEET I KNEW IT I AM SO HAPPY I WAS PATIENT YAYAYAYAYAY.

Nothing to forgive; too lovely to be upset (though I screamed and sobbed multiple times) and it was beautiful and beAUTY.

CHAD IS OFFICIALLY OFF THE LIST AND YAY FOR SUPERJOSH COMING TO THE RESCUE AND TELLING HER HOW AMAZING SHE IS BECAUSE HAYLEY IS SERIOUSLY THE MOST AMAZING THING IN THE WORLD. HOW COULD YOU EVEN DO THAT TO POOR BABY HAYLEY THOUGH. IT'S LIKE YOU HAVE NO HEART DX THANK GOD FOR JOSH. HE AND I ARE TOTALLY GOING TO TRACK DOWN CHAD TOGETHER. BUT AWW JOSH MADE HER SMILE AND THEY HUGGED AND KISSED AND SHE KNEW ALL ALONG IT'S ALWAYS BEEN HIM AND NO ONE ELSE. LIKE NO IT'S NEVER EVER BEEN ANYONE ELSE AND I'M SO GLAD SHE SAW THAT THE MAN WHO LOVED HER AND WAS GOING TO CARE FOR HER WAS RIGHT IN FRONT OF HER THE WHOLE TIME. AND YOU KNOW WHAT JOSH TOUR CAN TOTALLY WAIT BECAUSE HAYLEY IS BETTER AND MORE IMPORTANT THAN TOUR. JUST UGH. SO MANY FEELS AND IT'S ALL YOUR FAULT. YOU WILL BE REPAID IN FULL I PROMISE YOU ALIYA. I PROMISE YOU.

okay so i read this as Dad's Song by Set It Off played and while it is not about the situation in this story at all i still should have known better and i didn't and these tears are my own damn fault

The paragraph about how all Hayley had to do was call and it would feel like they were together, I choked and squeaked because that's adorable and so cute and awawaw and I support this already because mystery guy is already proving to be a fabulous human because he is a klutz and you can't say that klutzes aren't adorable because they are and we all know it.

"...but I didn’t mind telling her about them because the whole point was that they made her happy."

OH MY LORDY HOW PERFECT AND PERFECT WAS THAT? SO PERFECT. AW. HE TELLS HIS EMBARRASSING MOMENTS BECAUSE THEY MAKE HER HAPPY. BEAUTIFUL.

But Hayley's all upset and crying and not beautiful really sad ow my heart wait what is a heart i don't have it anymore after this slew of story pain. And then he just gets on a plane because he needs her and it's perfect because he doesn't have the heart to let her be upset no fuck that hE IS COMING FOR HER HE UNDERSTANDS THAT THIS IS WHAT MUST BE DONE BECAUSE HE MADE A PROMISE TO HER THAT HE'D ALWAYS BE THERE FOR HER IF SHE NEEDED HIM OH MY GOOOOD.

The description of how upset and broken Hayley looked and just was hurt me and I can't and-and...what. Hold on, did I just. Did I just see. Did Chad just.

chad you little fuck do you really need me to come over with a machete and chop you into fucking bits look what you did are you ready for what you are going to experience because you, my friend, are dead.

CHAD YOU FUCKING SON OF A CUNT BASTARD HOW COULD YOU DO THAT TO HER?! HAYLEY LOVED YOU AND YOU JUST LEAVE?! GAHH. Whoever this protagonist is is CLEARLY a wonderful lad who came ALL THE WAY from bloody wherever he lives to take care of her like a proper gentleman and I APPLAUD HIM. Poor sweet Hayley, sitting their crying and trying not to and just FUCK CHAD OKAY? Whoever this protagonist is is going to comfort her and take care of her and it's going to be absolutely fabulous because if he's willing to get on a plane for her, then he's definitely the guy she should be spending her time with. Poor Hayley. OW OKAY I WASN'T PREPARED FOR HER TO BE SO BROKEN. DAMN IT ALIYA. ALL YOUR FAULT. If this mystery guy doesn't come in and save the day and make her all sunshine and smiles again I am going to be absolutely distraught. HAYLEY DESERVES HAPPINESS AND A MAN WHO CAN TAKE CARE OF HER. WHICH OBVIOUSLY ISN'T CHAD. HE JUST FELL OFF THE EDGE OF THE LIST NOW IF YOU WERE WONDERING. MYSTERY GUY GETS TO TAKE HIS SLOT.