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White Haired Moonlight and a Black Haired Waiter - Comments

  • Dinobunny518

    Dinobunny518 (100)

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    I love this story so much. Please update soon! I would love to read more chapters
    June 19th, 2015 at 10:30am
  • foreversmiling2198

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    I really like this story, but the only thing I would change is making a new line when someone talks that way the chapters aren't just one huge block because it makes them hard to read...for example instead of:
    <b> “Yeah,” she said looking uneasy. “That’s awesome,” I said. “It’s nothing good,” she answered. </b>
    it would be:
    “Yeah,” she said looking uneasy.
    “That’s awesome,” I said.
    “It’s nothing good,” she answered.
    Other than that the story is amazing and I can't wait to see where it goes!
    April 6th, 2014 at 01:39am
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