I really like this story, but the only thing I would change is making a new line when someone talks that way the chapters aren't just one huge block because it makes them hard to read...for example instead of: <b> “Yeah,” she said looking uneasy. “That’s awesome,” I said. “It’s nothing good,” she answered. </b> it would be: “Yeah,” she said looking uneasy. “That’s awesome,” I said. “It’s nothing good,” she answered. Other than that the story is amazing and I can't wait to see where it goes!
April 6th, 2014 at 01:39am
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