Steal a Kiss in the Dark - Comments

@ losing control.
You're not coming off as harsh at all! The feedback is greatly appreciated and I'll definitely trying working on making everything less stiff! Thank you!

This is an interesting story (well, the two chapters I've read so far) and the layout is gorgeous. It's been a while since I've read a story that switches POV every chapter so that was interesting to read. I like that you made Mia and the guys be friends when they were younger, and then drift apart once the boys got big, and I'm assuming a bit farther into the story they're gonna meet up again. I also like that the characters are actually adults, and you aren't keeping them stuck in high school or anything, I love reading about "grown up" characters.

I found it a little confusing having bits of of the present mixed in with the past, like in the second chapter where Alex was thinking about grad and then kind of went back and thought about not being able to graduate without Mia. I think it would be a little bit more effective if you went through the whole flashback and then went back to what he thought. If that makes sense. Also, with the interactions between the characters, be careful not to make everything too stiff. It seemed like every time Mia giggled, so did the other characters, and things like that. The dialogue and their interactions just seemed a little bit stiff and predictable sometimes.

Anyways, I hope that didn't come off as harsh, I really do like this story! I'm definitely gonna read the rest of it because I want to know if Mia and Alex end up getting together or what's gonna happen. Nice job

This story is awesome, I really like the way its written and everything is just so flowy, im definitely recommending this :D

This story is awesome, I really like the way its written and everything is just so flowy, im definitely recommending this :D

I'm still so in love with this story. Mia's so sassy and awesome :3

Very interested, just started reading it today, please keep going, it's very interesting, I wanna see more.

Ohh i like this story! Im excited for the next update!

I think it was okay she was just looking out for her friend.

1. Do you think Mia really misses Baltimore or is it the guys she misses? I think it's both that she misses.
2. Was it good for Mia's mom to just spill everything she thought about Mia?yes!
3. Overall thoughts? This chapter is so sweet. c:

@ Larissamastmann
Thank you, I'm glad you like it(:

I'm seriously in love with this story.

1. What do you think is going to happen at the signing? They're going to think its Mia d:
2. Why doesn't Mia want the guys to recognize her? Because she doesnt want to bring up her past again?
3. Do you think there's a reason behind Mia wearing the Barakat baseball tee? Because she misses them o:
4. How do you feel about Mia's relationship with Nicole? With Chris? Aw great c:

1. Overall thoughts on this chapter? Oh my god.
2. Do you think it's Chris who sent the e-mail to Matt? I have a feeling yes, probably, but also a little doubt.
3. Is it okay for Alex to be this... jealous... after years of not talking to Mia? Of course.
4. Is it weird that Jack still talks to Mia's mom and goes over to her house a lot? No, not really. I suppose d:
5. Did the guys say the right things to Alex? Yes.
6. If it is Mia, how do you think Alex and the rest of the guys will react? I think Alex will probably flip out or something idunno o:
7. Also, do you like this alternating point of view thing I'm doing or should I just stick to one persons POV?the alterning pov is so much better c:

1. I feel like they're going to reconnect and be best friends again. :D
2. I feel like she will go back to baltimore, after a little while. d:
3. Eh, he seems okay so far, but I think hes going to end up with Marissa. :c
4. I love Nicole! Marissa, she was flirting with Mias boyfriend, so I feel like Chris and her have a little thing going on, so I think they might end up together. d:
I'm so excited for this story. c:

love it (:

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