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Brilliant take on a brilliant to show. Already looking forward to the next chapter.

Have you ever watched the show the Knick? I'm not sure why but every time I read your story the background imagery instantly reminds me of it and I adore it. As always your fanfic is one of my all time favorites and it always brightens my day when you update because you are one of the very few writers who captures Thomas ever so perfectly. I honestly can't ever seem to get enough and it totally gets me by whenever I've just finished a new episode and I want more, excellent job as ever!

ngl I haven't heard of Peaky Blinders at all, so I can't say much in terms of characterisation or anything, but I'm reading it as an original to quell some possible confusion. Before I keep reading / commenting, I just want to say that I love the layout + icons! I like how desaturated it is, and the plainness seems very fitting as it really draws attention to the text.

Prologue :: I love your writing voice. It's very sophisticated, versus casual, and the first line drew me in like *snap*. The reading for me was a bit choppy at first, because there were some bits that sounded like they needed extra words (for example, "grenades that meant to explode hadn’t") to get that really nice flow going, but then I got really into it and the flow happened anyway.
——I really like the formatting of the prologue as well, how it begins with talk of miracles, and then a "list". You know it's interesting, because as a non-American I've been told that people from the States (myself) don't say "the States", they just say "America", or "back home", haha. Anyway, FRICKING YES I've just got to the end of the chapter and the last sentence is perfect.

Chapter 1 :: So the other thing I've realised is that this is in first person, and while I'm not generally a fan of stories in first person as I feel they go too fast and aren't descriptive enough, you pretty much kill all of my preconceived notions. There's just the right amount of description, and I really like the pacing of the story so far. I really liked this sentence: "I’d been desensitized to men dying, but not children - never children" — it made me wonder how old Evelyn is herself, because it seems she'd be rather young if she still had a role as a "daughter" rather than already being married off (guesstimating the time period).
——I like how there's a bit of humour in it, and I like how I get to see some more of Evelyn's personality — she seems very mature and put together. Also, self aware. There were again some grammar-y bits with the dialogue that cut up my reading flow, but otherwise I really liked the story so far.

Chapter 2 :: I feel like Evelyn's unnecessarily withholding information. Like, c'mon girlfriend, it's not that hard to say you fixed up some dude who shot himself in the head. I think Dr Anson (who seems to also be called Richard? Every other mention of him seems to be a different name) seems (paternally?) fond of Evelyn, but I also feel like she probably won't listen to him. As mature as she seemed in the previous chapter, she also seems to be a kind of character who has a very strict set of morals and thinks that's exactly right. Good to know she's not fearless, though.

Anyway, I think this has pretty much convinced me to start watching Peaky Blinders It's wonderfully written and I'm really excited for what's next!!

I love post-war stories and I really can't wait to read more of what you have in store for this!

@ Mrs.Roman Godfrey
Thank you! :)

I really adore this! Just reading the prologue and I'm already hooked. I love your visuals, your themes, your leading lady, and like I said everything lol. I'm dying for more keep up the fantastic work!