Quiet Places - Comments

@ C418
No, don't misinterpret anything I stated. Your story is brilliant and original. And it does feel the same, only with a better touch to feelings and realization. Its very good, so rest assured.

@ Tipsy Returns
Thank you so much! I tried to keep it as close to the original as I could, but I changed the ending and some of the setting. I hope it still feels like the same story. :(

God. If the previous one was brilliant, this is mind blowing. I really loved the way his feelings were described. The console is mockingly clean and the mirror just above the visual monitor reflects a horrible sight back at me: the face of a broken soul. Fantastic.
Then ending again, had a superb statement. But... I missed the lines I quoted in the last piece. They should've been here. Anyway, you're an amazing writer. Keep up the great work! :)

Summary/Title/Layout: The layout's simple, I like it. I also like the quote you use in the summary.

Opening: Strong sentence, draws me in, I would recommend changing the "Because" but you don't have to.

Ah, a journey through space. I was wondering what was causing the end. I like stories that take place in space where people...I'm not going to finish that sentence. Haha.

"My mass will carry me to the end of time long after my body has ceased to pulse." that's powerful.

I can't imagine how it would feel to be in the middle of space of all places and knowing you're never going to make it home. That's scary.

I like the way you wrote this and described all the main characters emotions. I can just feel them.

Ending: "I will never return to my planet." Wow. That's so sad. I can't imagine how his family's going to feel or his friends. Wow. Good job.