After Life - Comments

This was really bittersweet to read. On one hand I wanted to feel happy for him because he was back with all the people he loved, but then on the other hand he had to die just to get there which is just so sad.

I really liked the emotion you put in this piece. Especially when Sirius was interacting with Marlene, I could feel how much he loved and missed her and I love that you were able to get all that emotion through with just a small amount of words. I thought it was interesting that Sirius didn't know he died and just thought he was seeing all of his friends again, that was a great way to start off the piece to be able to transition to the rest of the story/

There were a few grammar errors here and there, but nothing major.

Overall, I thought this was a really sweet piece. Nice job!

I like it.. Sirius dying is so sad... in the jk rowling books and in fanfiction.... but well written!

AWWW :')

He's back with his friends, even though he died...

This is so good! Sirius;s death always makes me cry, whether I'm reading it or watching it, because it's always so sad, but this puts a kinda happy spin on it and I like that. Great job with it.

AWWW :')

He's back with his friends, even though he died...

This is so good! Sirius;s death always makes me cry, whether I'm reading it or watching it, because it's always so sad, but this puts a kinda happy spin on it and I like that. Great job with it.

Oh. My. God.

After I read the third sentence, I realized who this is about and I froze. Sirius's death is so sad and I have no idea why it's necessary...

Anyway, I thought this was really cute. I thought the angle was going to be another one of those overdone ones, but it wasn't! This was really different and sort of fluffy and I liked it. :)