Let me start off by saying that I adore the simplicity of your layout which is very fitting with the quote you picked, and the short summary really makes me wonder what your story will be about. Well done on that!
On to the story itself, let's start with the first chapter. I like the way you stwarted this. Really clever if I may say. Sarah's character is honest and I like the way she started writing her letter to Benjamin, the feelings she portrayed and how she lost her temper at the end, especially that P.S. Well done here as well.
On to the second chapter, only at the end did I understand that her letter hadn't reached him. I lenjoyed your detailed descriptions and even though you didn't bring anything new on the table, this was still a good read.
Historical fiction can be hard to write if you don't have the right knowledge so congratz for writing this as good as you did. There are some minor writing mistakes or missing commas here and there - but nothing major.
I give this piece eight out of ten writing pens.
Thank you very much for your entry. Don't forget to check the contest later today to see the results. Good luck!
I'm here to read this entry for my Quotes used as Summaries Contest.
Let me start off by saying that I adore the simplicity of your layout which is very fitting with the quote you picked, and the short summary really makes me wonder what your story will be about. Well done on that!
On to the story itself, let's start with the first chapter. I like the way you stwarted this. Really clever if I may say. Sarah's character is honest and I like the way she started writing her letter to Benjamin, the feelings she portrayed and how she lost her temper at the end, especially that P.S. Well done here as well.
On to the second chapter,
only at the end did I understand that her letter hadn't reached him.
Historical fiction can be hard to write if you don't have the right knowledge so congratz for writing this as good as you did. There are some minor writing mistakes or missing commas here and there - but nothing major.
I give this piece eight out of ten writing pens.
Thank you very much for your entry.
-Marian.