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Soooo this is amazing. I don't think I will ever be over your amazing ability to tell a story! And I'm really loving this one so far. It's just so mysterious and I don't even know... but I was pulled in easily, and I'm definitely subscribing cause now I need to know what's going on. Your writing, as usual, is superb! Literally, every sentence of yours that I read I'm always just thinking "how does she do that?!?!???" I don't even know what to say, but you're brilliant. Your writing is brilliant, your storytelling is brilliant. I wish I could write a comment that's a bit more constructive, but there's nothing to say. This is simply amazing!

omg okay I reaaaaaaally like this. First of all, I dig the layout. And second, the first chapter just instantly hooks you in and I literally couldn't stop reading. I was like, WHAT HAPPENED?!??!?!?!? I already like the main character already. And Sky. I like Sky a lot. He sounds cute idk. But this story is pretty great and it deserves more love than it gets.

I’m absolutely loving this! There’s so much suspense and chaos just in the first chapter, grabbing my attention immediately, and the imagery is so lifelike. I love how well you show what these characters are like instead of directly stating who they are; it’s not something easily done, but you pull it off so well.

“Death is a hot stove and we’re just children fascinated by the burner.” That is such a compelling line, holy crap. And I love the allusions and references to Kurt Cobain and Jim Morrison (if I’m not mistaken, they’re part of “the 27 club,” right? ), since it adds a whole other layer of symbolism even though your writing is already so deep. There’s a raw spirit in this that makes it feel so real and yet so movielike, but not in a pretentious way at all. (I’m not sure if that makes sense, forgive me. XD) The dialogue is so natural, too, and the plotline itself is so interesting!

I’m officially hooked on this story, and I can’t wait to read more – your writing is beautiful and twisted in the best way possible.

I'm seriously digging the stories I'm getting from my Mibba bowl. Amazing imagery and especially the internal and external dialogue, made it create a pretty interesting picture in my mind of the scenarios happening. The first chapter pulled me in so I'm looking forward to reading more, I shall subscribe. Please update soon.

P.S I thought it was funny you mentioned 'between Mailbu and Paso Robles' cause I live in PR lol. Not too many people know where this place is haha.

I've only read the first chapter but your imagination is creative and crazy. I love it!!! I really liked how you wrote this story, especially the dialogue because you took on the part of someone being in a fire and I certainly know that you don't talk like you would normally do. Keep up the fantastic work, I'll come back and read the rest of the chapters after!!

Hi, I'm here from my mibbaween bowl. I read the first two chapters so far. I love your imagery. I could seriously the scenes you wrote like a movie. It's beautiful, and that photo of Candy you used looked exactly how I imagined her in my head. That's awesome.

After reading twp chapters (which really have nothing for me to complain about) I am dying to find out more about the club, and Sky. What on Earth started that fire? And now Who the heck is Candy and what kind of way is that to ask someone out? Okay, I can't lie, her date proposal was creepy, funny, and amazing all in one. :)

Now, I'm going to rec + sub before I read chapters 3 + 4

Hello,

This story was amazing. Your characters are amazing and I feel as if I'm watching a movie as I read. The suspense was so intense, I kept going until I reached the end of the first chapter (sorry it's all I have to read right now). The only thing I wished was that the summary could be a little better, regarding diction but that's just my opinion I honestly thought the rest was really good. Also, I kind of felt the person carrying sky should have been talking back at him instead of making it part of the content. The dialogue was really realistic despite the world created. Awesome story.

i just picked up this story a few nights ago and read the description and was hooked; it hasn't been updated since may, but i'm hoping that because there's some new interest in the story that maybe you'll start it back up.

i am completely in love with the character development and the entire idea of this story. please continue, i know that no matter where it goes i'll enjoy reading it. you are truly talented. xox

THIS IS AMAZING

THIS IS AMAZING

OH MY GOD

Uhhh..... This is disgustingly fantastic and amazing.

A-M-A-Z-I-N-G

This is perfect. You are perfect. Please just continue to be perfect.

I love every little thing about this story. I'm a little lost at what's going on but I know with time I will. I'm just so excited and happy about all the details and beautiful flowery words you put into this. Goodness, amazing!

idk what this is but i'm head over heels in love with it.

A MILLION TIMES YES

um where do I even begin!?!?!?????

that prolouge? TWENTY SEVEN SECONDS TO DIE

yaaaaaaas

bleeding heart liberal
YES

THIS WHOLE THING IS A YES!!!

cough um anyway...

But that chapter was flawless and I'm genuinely looking forward to more from you soon (: