Scar Death Magic - Comments

nearly witches. (15250)

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Layout / Summary

Again with the mysterious summaries. Your writing really does draw me in from the get-go. I also love the layout, it's gorgeous.

content

(I was going to split this into chapters but I figured it'd be easier to just let my brain vomit out in the one section)

I don't know what it is about this, but the word choice in this really makes me happy. It's such a varied vocabulary and it makes every sentence interesting in a completely different way. The description is so vivid and...I can't think of any word, but weird. It's so unique and quirky and the extended electrical metaphors are just stunning. Even from the beginning, I don't really know what's going on but something has hooked me in and made me continue reading.

Quote
she’s our weapon of mass destruction
she will kill them all before the sun burns out
before the fiery explosion is sucked into a vacuum
and spat out, incinerating the stars
into blistering black holes where beating hearts once existed

I absolutely adore this section. It's such a powerful image and I don't even know why, but every time I read it, I get goosebumps. In a really weird, roundabout way, it reminds me of Courtney Love's verses in Rat-a-Tat by Fall Out Boy. I haven't a clue how my mind made the connection, but it's really clever and I just love that section as a whole.

Honestly, everything is just so abstract and unusual and interesting. Usually I'd completely freak out about the formatting (I like my sentences and paragraphs to be formatted normally) but this has a definite charm to it. I also like that you bleed a little of the story into every chapter - it actually took me until the end to realise what was going on because I'm a little slow, but it really worked and when it came together, I thought the entire plot was absolute genius.

Overall

I absolutely adore this. I can't even fault anything because it was so wonderful. Amazing job!

May 19th, 2014 at 05:59pm

Kasi FM (105)

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Location:: Jersey

This just wow give me a moment. I've never read something like this before and wow. This was amazing. The word choice and imaginative ways of putting it was just marvelous. I think your favorite chapter was also my favorite chapter. This is just so awesome and so cute in a way. Just wow. Def. recommending.

April 28th, 2014 at 09:52pm