Wake the Dead - Comments

Kevin.:

By the way, is that a real song/poem throughout the story? Or did you make it up. It was really effective :)

Yes, the story is named after it and it's by The Used. :) It's a really awesome song.

Thank you for your comment btw. :cute:

By the way, is that a real song/poem throughout the story? Or did you make it up. It was really effective :)

This was amazing :cheese:

Saw it on the pimping and reccing thread and I'm really into the whole horror original fiction at the moment. This is exactly the breath of fresh air I was looking for. From the beginning I was picking out lines I wanted to put in here that I loved so I could comment on them but after a few paragraphs I gave up. There were so many beautifully described paragraphs and statements in there...It was just...Wow.

I was really shocked to see you kill her in the end, especially as the moon came out. I thought that was like a signal for the zombies to go back in and whatnot but the way you killed her was just beyond describing. The whole warm memories waiting for this moment part is just...

It was just too amazing for words :cheese:

I really like this one! ususally I'm not into horror oneshots but this one actually had kind of a comedic feel to it. like how you were tossing the bodies like they were made of foam and people were diving into trees
lol.
also, it was very well written and not cheesy and predictable like other stories.
it was a HUGE shock that she died in the end! usually they would've let the girl live.
I liked it!

It's great to read a good ol' fashioned, proper horror story. Reminiscent of Dawn of The Dead and stories of that ilk. Fantastically well written. An absolute triumph in the horror genre. Seriously amazing!

OMGOMGOMGOMGOMG@!!!! I FREAKING OUT HERE!! I LOVED IT!!! BUT YOU CANT LET HER DIE!!!!!!! OMGOMGOGMOGMGOMOGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOM<GOOM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! HHHAHAHHAHH!! OMGOMGOMHPO THAT WASD SO AWEOME AND SCARY!!! I ALMOSt SCREAMED!! I FELT LIKE I WAS HER!!!

First of all, I liked the topic. Normally whenever anyone does a fantasy-horror story it's always with vampires or werewolves - never with zombies.

I liked how the character automatically decided that the sound wasn't real. Unlike a lot of stories where thy freak out at first then go see what it is, which doesn't make much sense because when someone's afraid they wouldn't want to see what's making the noise. I liked how the character decided it was a dream, gave the character personality.

I could barely make out anything else. Just heads, feet and fingers. Some bones showed, glittering with slime and long-caked blood where light hit. Where the mossy brown skin remained, it was tinted a mossy greenish brown.
^ I liked that description of the zombies. You didn't go into paragraphs right away of how they looked - which you could've. It was short and simple, yet I could get a perfect image along with my imagination which a reader should be able to do.

I seized its wrist with my own two hands, trying to ignore the awful feeling of decomposition, the skin crawling with parasites, the bones crackling like deadwood.
^ That one made me go 'ew'. xD

That was one of the weirdest one-shots I've ever read. Really. Good, but very weird. I liked how you didn't go all into why the zombies were doing this to the people. I liked how you just put the message of 'You have disturbed us from our rest, and now the dead shall take your place.'
It left it to our imagination to what the people did to disturb them.