Beautiful Mess - Comments

I really like this. You're very good at writing out tension and getting the readers to feel exactly what you're putting on the page. I think that this will be a very interesting story. I'm excited to see where it goes!

I'm so vocal when discontent that it seems strange that couples don't hash things out. I have a feeling Dylan is going to be her white knight here

Awe pool girl :(. He's a jerk. I hope Dylan and her get together. :)

I love Dylan also. "Wink Wink" he's awesome. Very good start. Can't wait to read more.

Looking forward to seeing where you are going with this. I noticed you started in first person and switched to third person, was that intentional?

Great so far!