She Devil - Comments

Very interesting and good way of using names and characters. Though kinda scary and cool

holy fuck!!! Why is this an one shot?!
I WANT MORE!!!

This was hot and really good. I was captivated not only by Lust's description but also by the way you used the sin you chose and made it fit perfectly with the situation. I agree with HerBrenBren when she mentioned that you were able to somehow describe within their intimacy the future he held after his soul was taken to Hell which it makes the story unique and different from others than just describing the sex and that's it. I loved the fact that you chose a curvy female as the OC because it gives an insight that not only skinny girls can be sexy and attractive to men. We curvy girls can as well! The layout and the colors fit perfectly with the story and the sin of Lust. I would of like a little more details to the actually sex scene but overall you did really good.

You did very good and thank you so much for participating in my contest. Good Luck!
xoxo, RP

Oh my good God...or should I say Oh my bad Lucifer? I LOVED this story! It was so completely different from things you have written before and from other stories on the site! I loved that the main character is not a "picture perfect" skinny character! I love her sinister ways and the power that comes with her being the deadly sin of Lust! I loved that she had the power to make herself look ragged and make the sound of men searching for her! I love that you related the sex to hell with the heat and everything else they felt almost a foreshadowing to the flames that were to come! I love that she decided to keep him as her play thing ( I mean it's Mattie who wouldn't?) On that subject I liked that someone who is into the Avenged fandom would get that this is Matt but someone who isn't would not be able to tell he was anything more than an original character which is a really good thing! What a great job! Good luck in the contest I am sure ou will do well!

@ HerBrenBren
I'm glad it does :)! I can't wait and thank you baby!

I can not wait to see this completed! The summary alone has me so damn excited!