The Ring - Comments

Great story!!! I think the plot has potential, sure. I can't wait for more, upload next chapter soon, pls ;)

wow, i'm absolutely floored with emotion by this piece. i think it was written wonderfully & the abrupt ending leaving the audience to contemplate the fate of both characters is absolutely heart-wrenching & i love it! i really adored the character development in this piece as it showed true human nature. evan stealing the ring & then regretting it afterwards while also seeming to accept the officer that has gone to arrest him. but ellen standing near the window & staring out at him was so heartbreaking for just that second.

I really like this story, specially the end because it ended with some sort of mystery as to what exactly happened. It made me ask questions such as, was Ellen the one who called the cops? And if she did, how did she know?
I sensed that he was very caring and truly loved her. To be honest when he was in the store it never accord to me that he was going to actually steal the ring, I think he was going to buy it and live in dept for the rest of his life. I was a bit shocked and then I wanted to know what was going to happened after. I liked how you made him feel guilty because he knew from the start what he did was wrong. I loved it and I believe you did a great job. I definitely will like to read a sequel because I am intrigue to know what will happen and how did the cops knew.

Great job!

@ Tipsy Returns
The abrupt ending was actually partially intentional because while I did run out of time before I had to turn this in (it was a school assignment), I thought not knowing the end gives it an element of mystery...but if you think it would make it better, I'm up for writing an epilogue! Thanks for the feedback xx

This story has a lot of potential. Just add another chapter and make i a happy ending. Then it'd be just perfect! I hope you'll continue this! Great work anyway (: