But You're Not Mine. - Comments

I really like the chapter you rewrote. It was amazing :)

I really enjoy this story, even for having just two chapters im hooked. I can not wait to read more and I agree with what @shirtless said about your story :)

Okay, I was so confused when I got to the second chapter. Not because of what you had written but because I had put my cursor over where the link to the next chapter would be and it hit me like ???there's not a next chapter??? and I waited literally two minutes because I thought my internet was running slow and hadn't loaded all of the page yet.

Well, you've caught my interest for sure, and throughout reading I've noticed a couple things:
1) You make subtle sex very sexy and imaginable, even without the dirty details. That's skill I've only seen by few writers, m'lady.
2) This story draws me in because I love the lack of background that the audience knows about, but the immediate immersion into the plot. It's as though you're stringing us along like 'deal with it~~~'. It's so mysterious and poor Ev -- he's so heartsick.
3) I strangely identify with this story.
4) You changed your username! Say whaaa.

Loves it.

This... is so beautiful.
You're an awesome writer!