Trenches - Comments

OHMYGOD. That beginning was everything for me. It started out so exquisitely that I seriously find myself not wanting to stop reading.

I've never read any war pieces before this. It was a little bit intimidating just thinking about it. But now that I actually read it (and reread it like three more times), I'm so glad I didn't wuss out lol. The idea and vision of war are so gruesome to me, but the way you captured it was so beautiful. The imagery was so strong in this, I felt like I was in it and I didn't want to leave, which is wild because war is the last place anyone wants to be in. I just can't over the fact that it felt so real reading it, it was trip that I'd definitely cut through the line and ride over and over again.

Reading it was heartbreaking since this was a real war. It's just crazy to me how much it feels like this is a real soldier's perspective on the events, but it's not. IT'S THE POWER OF YOUR BEAUTIFUL WRITING, MY FRIEND. Also that last sentence, "Because war stops for nobody, and Tokyo is next." Wow. This was such a powerful ending despite it just being one simple sentence. I am so moved.

You did a fantastic job, you are truly a gifted writer!

Oh.My.God.
This piece gave me chills! Especially at the end!

You have such a gift writing realistic and beautiful war pieces.

this is absolutely heart wrenching & beautiful. imm stunned that this doesn't have more comments -- it absolutely deserves it at the most. the way you describe war as a whole from the perspective of a soldier is just as heart tearing as it can be. it feels like i just lived the whole experience when in reality i haven't & people actually have. & they suffered from other bouts of man that simply didn't care who they were killing. they were only retaliating despite the consequences.

i think i just saw one grammar error but aside that, wondrous job again