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Wonderland - Comments
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This was so good, if you don't win, I will throw celery at the contest holder haha :DMay 16th, 2014 at 08:51am
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Loved it! Really hope you win, lady. <3May 15th, 2014 at 09:42am
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It doesn't make sense in the typical way, but since it's based on Alice in Wonderland, it's not really supposed to, is it? I like your take on Wonderland from an adult's mind.
I'm excited for the ending. I have a feeling I know at least part of what will happen. Update, STAT! May 13th, 2014 at 09:46am -
Oh wow! Tripping balls, that girl is. Lol. WHEN GOOD TRIPS GO BAD! Dun dun dunnnnnn! Can't wait for the next one.May 12th, 2014 at 11:02am
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Great first chapter, loved the end "Candy flipping" sounded so fun haha. Can't wait for more dear!May 11th, 2014 at 09:59pm
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Great first chapter, loved the end "Candy flipping" sounded so fun haha. Can't wait for more dear!May 11th, 2014 at 09:59pm
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Great first chapter, loved the end "Candy flipping" sounded so fun haha. Can't wait for more dear!May 11th, 2014 at 09:59pm
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Oh awesome! I'm so curious about where this is gonna goMay 11th, 2014 at 12:10am
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Luck! <3May 10th, 2014 at 09:39am
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OK, I love this so far!!!!! Can't wait to see where it goes:) I've only ever done mushrooms once, but I tripped out so bad, lol, like im talking little blue blobs dancing around my feet and shit. LolMay 10th, 2014 at 08:54am
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Good Luck, dear! I'm excited for this!!May 8th, 2014 at 07:01pm
Off With Her Head
Okay, I'm already in love with the premise of this story. Alice in Wonderland already feels like a trip and a half, so I'm sure this story will mirror that if there are shrooms in it! Your dialogue also flows super naturally and I appreciated that, especially the last line!
Down the Rabbit Hole
God, I'm living for this! I love how you have the Cheshire Cat, the twins, Queen of Hearts, and the Mad Hatter. And I love that you added an adult flair by adding sex into the mix.
Curiouser and Curiouser
I love the twist you added that Wonderland is real. Or, at least, it is to the reader. I'm expecting quite a few twists and I probably won't be ready for them. I enjoy the way you characterized Cheshire Cat! I thought it was spot on. And I'm also noticing the way you alternate between Alice and Jenna.
Through the Looking Glass
I thought the twist that Jenna/Alice would have to give head was quite funny and fitting for an adult Alice in Wonderland and I really appreciated what you did with that. And I lloved the ending! The Queen telling her that she was welcome back was another twist I wasn't expecting, but I love when Jenna realized it was all real. It was the perfect ending to a perfect story! Well done!