The Girl Who Wept - Comments

First of all yay Rose and the doctor! She was my favourite companion... now onto the actual story, this was interesting... I really like how you got straight to the point, there was no long journey to get to where the story really began, which is a nice change.

I loved it :)

Layout/Summary
I like that the layout's simple, the gif you chose is very interesting and the summary makes me wonder about this girl.

Part One
Content:
I like how your story dives straight into the action. There's a sense of urgency at the very beginning of the story.

I think I would slightly change this sentence "…looking at the angelic stone statues that surrounded the girl, facing her." It just sounds a little off to me. ^_^

Whoa, that's a statement for sure, "Yes, quite beautiful, until you blink and then they either send you to a different time period or kill you.”

Wow, I was not expecting that from the angel statues. That's so creepy. Ah, that's where the gif comes into play now. It's such an excellent choice.

The Doctor thinks the girl's their pet. That's an…interesting thought. Haha. I love the last sentence of the first part a lot.

Spelling/Grammar:
"fell* down in soft ringlets" instead of feel.
met* instead of meet

Part Two
Content:
I'm a little put off by The Doctor's attitude toward the girl about the angels wanting her. Wow, I can't believe the angels slaughtered her siblings. that's so hardcore though! I like that the angels took her in. I'm interested in how they all…live though. The girl at least. Is she human? Or something else…

Well overall, I really like this story. I didn't see any mistakes other than the ones I listed above.

I wasn't familiar with the Doctor Who fandom, but I don't think that took away from the story at all. I'm glad it's just a prequel for another story. I'm fascinated by these weeping angels as I don't know if they're part of the actual show or not. I'm interested in knowing more about this girl too. I like stories that are titled similar to yours "The Girl Who Wept" too. I love how you've made me so curious about all this stuff. It's nice to have questions at the end of a story.

So I like the layout. The colours are nice and simple, but still pretty. The gif you've used it quite strange haha, but I feel like it settles in with the story. It's quite creepy in it's own sense.

The summary drew me in. I haven't ever watched Doctor Who (shame on me) but I have a feeling I won't require any knowledge of the characters :)

Okay the first chapter is kind of creepy, I will admit that. I liked it though. The way that the Doctor is so protective over Rose, but still doesn't really want to leave until he find out some information made me smile. I like him as a character. These angel things are very strange. I don't know if they're in the show or whatever? Probably. But I think I have a pretty clear grasp of that they do. Nw this girl, the last sentence in this chapter was a nice finisher. I'm intrigued to what the second chapter will tell me.

Oh holy... so the angels slaughtered her siblings. ::schock: I'm not as in love with these statues as I was in the last chapter, so say the least. But I can very much relate to her sibling wanting to scare her haha. It's quite strange how protective the weeping angels are of the girl. But I guess it's kind of nice. I do feel bad for her though, it seems as if she's locked up in there with no one at all.

Anyway, I really loved this! I hope you consider doing a sequel or something.

Quite interesting. You know.. I have never watched Doctor Who. (Please do not kill me?) In fact, I did not even know the how existed until six months or so ago. Though, this definitely has me intrested in taking a gander at the show.

And just as you have left him with so many questions, you have also left me with many. I do not like that, and I do not necessarily advise you to continue doing that, though some people do like being left wondering, left to make it up themselves. Nonetheless, your writing is excellent and I enjoyed the story. I hope you continue on with your writing.

Oh my god it did post -facepalm-

:O Her family sucked!

I loved that touch you put in about the angel holding her and baring it's fangs - that's so awesome! I imagined it whilst I was reading it and I was like "NOPENOPENOPE FUCK THAT" Haha, they seem scary as fuck

I love that you left the Doctor with so many questions, and I love how she never really got a real name.

I LOVE THIS. I'm adding it to my list of stories to put in my rec blog ^.^

I know I have already commented on the layout but goddamn I love it. The use of the GIF instead of just a regular angel is just excellent. Make's it unique.

I like how you've made the doctor have some sarcastic tones in his responses to Rose, I can see him rolling his eyes at her alot, it's a real authentic feeling you've created between the two of them - the dialogue backs it up x1000.

I never saw it coming that she could understand them, such an excellent twist! And the fact that he automatically jumped to her being 'their pet' made me giggle, it sounds like something he really would deduce from the situation.

I love the ending line, it's such a good use of speech to leave it as a cliffhanger! I have alot of questions about her, mainly, why did she weep? but also why does that make her special to the angels? and of course is she now trapped there because she wept?

I can't wait for more, I thought it might take a couple days to see a chapter for this but you surprised me again! So jealous of your ability to just write and have it turn to perfection!

I litterally smiled so big reading the bottom of your authors note, I've never had a story dedicated to me before. You are popping so many of my Mibba cheeries lately, haha.