Lie to Me - Comments

This was amazing! I absolutely adored it. I did find it difficult to differentiate who was talking at certain times, but that didn't really stop the flow of the story or how it impacted me. I think you described the characters really well and I felt for Frank when Gerard kept leading him on and breaking his heart. Honestly, what an emotional rollercoaster. Definitely worth reading!

This was amazing! I absolutely adored it. I did find it difficult to differentiate who was talking at certain times, but that didn't really stop the flow of the story or how it impacted me. I think you described the characters really well and I felt for Frank when Gerard kept leading him on and breaking his heart. Honestly, what an emotional rollercoaster. Definitely worth reading!

@ JustStopKellinMe
Alrighty! I'll be looking forward to it! (:

@ Tipsy Returns
Okay! I've been super busy with school so I'm not quite ready. I will try to write the first chapter and post it this weekend.

@ JustStopKellinMe
Ah hah. Just let me know whenevr you want the comment hun! (:

@ Tipsy Returns

Can you give me a week to post a new one?

@ Tipsy Returns

Can you give me a week to post a new one?

@ JustStopKellinMe
The story as a whole was very nice. You won Honorable Mention, so let me know which story you want a comment on! (:

@ Tipsy Returns
Thanks for the review! I felt it was "unromantic" because it was unrequited and more of an angst story instead of something fluffy. I thought you meant more romantic as requited love instead of unrequited love and even though this was about love as a central theme, the story itself was more of about Frank's struggle with his deeper feelings and the fact Gerard only went to him for friendship or sex.

FOr the errors, I tried to proof it as much as possible and had a couple friends, but people always mess up.

THank you for the overall compliments. It really means a lot

Hey! I'm here to judge the contest.

Content
This was amazingly well written. It had a sad feel to it, and I couldn't help but feel that Gerard was in love with Frank too, only he couldn't admit his feelings, or come to terms with his reality. The events flowed together perfectly, almost like watching a movie. The different time periods didn't confuse me and there was realism in your portrayal. My complaint though, is this - the contest was supposed to have 'unromantic' entries, while this story revolved around 'love' itself. It is my fault though, I admit, since I should have been more specific. Otherwise, it was perfect.

Errors
To be honest, there were quite a few minor mistakes that I came across, like a 'was' instead of 'were' was used, but since the story is lengthy I couldn't manage to point them all out. I'm sorry about that.

Overall
Perfectly written. The strain in the guys' relationship was heart breaking, and the phases of life they went through - too real. I really like your writing style and the way the characters turned out. The ending was beautiful, and sad both. Really enjoyed reading this. Keep up the good work!

@ heroes.
I'm sorrrrrry.

Dammit my angst writing.

Dammit dammit dammit

@ RayTorosArmy
I'm so sorry but I regret nothing. If it helps I remember crying while writing it.

@ Luna_Mark
Maybe I'll write more. Like a sequel or something. I had written this a long time ago and I found it on my computer so I decided to edit the grammar and stuff and post so, I might not add more. I'm sorry for the feels attack D:

well i just got punched in the face and the gut and the spine and the face again

dammit gerard

dammit feels

dammit everything and everyone and damn the perfection and dammit

this was perfect

im in so much pain holy fuck

can i like beat the shit out of gerard

THIS FIC WAS AMAZING BUT SO SAD AND I WISH THERE WAS MORE WITH A HAPPY ENDING

Keep up the great work : )