May 29th, 2014 at 02:21am
From the beginning, I like how you form the words and the imagery you used. Your description is flawless too! I can definitely picture everything in my mind. And the emotions... the emotions are just so raw and it hits me right in the core of my heart. I found myself in tears by the end of the diary entry and it's really heartbreaking. Like... it's not easy to find love like these two people did and it's tragic that they had to be separated from each other and now Eric was taken away from her forever and I can't imagine how she must've felt.
This story was beautifully written and I think you did a really good job with this piece. Kudos to you!
I honestly don't know what to say. The way you manipulated your words in order to construct such a perfect image of their love was breathtaking, and it made the pain that Vanessa feels all too real. It's a tragic story of love that is what people crave, as well as the ending that it can meet prematurely. Her love for Eric is one that can be felt through the words she writes, and that is undeniable. The way you've been able to allow the emotion to seep through the words so effortlessly is brilliant.
This was beautiful to read. You did a wonderful job.