Please Come Back to Me. - Comments

I’m here as the new host for ‘The Writing Contest’.

I like the premise behind this. I even like the drama of Dean leaving her behind and then them having to reconcile because he can’t just leave her behind anymore. I feel like Elena and Dean are definitely meant to be if Dean would stop being such a stubborn pain. I also really like Elena as a character because she’s strong and sassy, but she also has her weaknesses. It was very realistic for her to have a panic attack over Rose being gone, but in the present day, she could probably verbally kick Sam and Dean’s asses. I love it. It creates a great and enjoyable dynamic between the three of them. I also love Rose’s sass! When she asked Dean for water, I actually laughed.

You had a lot of spelling and grammatical errors, though. It made it very hard for me to totally get into the story because the entire story had a really awkward and choppy flow—which pacing was at fault for, too. The pacing overall is very quick, so you move from one scene to another clumsily and with no emotional depth. You summed up everything in such a short amount of time and you had Dean do a 180 practically overnight. I feel like there should be a lot more focus on character development since you have such an emotionally demanding and complex plot. So you should definitely edit your chapters more thoroughly and spread out your content in details.

I do think you have a story with great potential, so I do hope you continue. Good job.

@ Synical
Oh yay I am so glad that you like it =D

Ahhhh!!! I love this! I really do. It was perfect actually and totally has me wanting to catch up on the seasons I've missed of Supernatural! I think the last episode I saw was the first disc of season six! So yeah....I'm way behind. I'm liking how detached Dean seems and I love Elena's character! More please?

@ Albluerose
You are so welcome honey. I love reading good Dean stories.

@ Matthew Sanders;
Im so glad you like it =D thank you so much =D

I really like this. I really hope to see more of this. Great start so far, and great story ;)