Regina Saxony - Comments

I really enjoy this. I always find myself admiring stories that merge history and romance and also manage to be chronologically accurate. It's very endearing, and this is one of those stories. Also, I love the name "Regina Saxony" and I'm glad you used it for the title. Please continue. :)

So, this isn't really my kind of story but your writing style is wonderful. I hope you continue to go with the wonderful talent you have, whether to please yourself or your readers (though, I hope you write mostly to please yourself).

I almost want to say good job but that sounds silly. In fact, I feel as if some of my comment, in general, is going to sound silly to you. Maybe my lack of sleep is interfering with the way I want my words to come out.

Now I'm rambling... The point is, is I really enjoy your writing style.

The first chapter is just fabulous. I love your writing style, it seems much more mature than a lot that I've read and even written myself. This story already draws me in with the beautiful introduction.

The way you describe things is just down right magical. I've never read about an artist painting like this, with so much detail and precise movements. And the hints towards something bad that happened are just subtle enough, its all so brilliant!

Ilya sounds so handsome, even with his fittingly large nose. I assumed he was talking about going to war, what with her calling him an idiot but robbing rich people doesn't sound like going to war to me. I must say, I'm only three chapters in and I find myself clicking the next chapters link with an urgency that I have never felt before!

Gosh they are so cute. I could live within the moment of this chapter for years. He wants to spend his whole life with her and its clear, despite her initial reaction to his admittance to love, that she feels the same. They seem so perfect and yet she is so angry. I freaking am obsessed already!

I can only assume that Ilya has left on the mentioned idiotic adventure he and Regina had been arguing about. That must be why shes been hard on him, shes toughening herself up it seems to deal with his absence. I wish i knew what was going on, like why can they not find bread? At first, I thought that maybe it was WWII but now im not so sure.

I'm definitely going to continue and leave another comment on the rest but for now I'll leave you with a new and very excited subscriber and a recommendation (:

Hey, me again. I promised to comment on your last chapter! Great description of how she had imagined her wedding to be, I think a lot of girls dream of how that day would be, but this description is sublime! you did a great job!

This is like reading a poem disguised as a story. The sentences flow very beautifully. English is probably your first language? (I always wanted it to be mine,.. but hey I'm dutch, why complain haha) I do love artistic characters too! 'We hardened souls carry on' AMAZING
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Please never stop writing

Honestly I was intrigued once I read the first line in chapter one. You've laid out the words like a poem. And I loved it.
My favorite line that got me thinking is "...we’re all a basket weave of the things that made us and broke us and the insecurity that makes us, us." Really every line in the first chapter got me to think. And the second chapter just wanted me to know more and more about Regina.

I'm really curious to see what happens next, especially since the summary describes an artist. Subbing for sure.

Layout and Summary - Your layout is simple but yet very easy to read. I love how the banner looks! Your short summary make this intriguing so I can't wait to start reading it!

Chapter 1 - Wow. This description is exquisite. Your use of figurative language is beautiful as well. I love how despite the length, you impacted a lot of emotions in this one chapter. Like sheepcat; said, it's dreamlike. It makes me want to read more!

Chapter 2 - Seriously though. Your description is practically intoxicating (weird word to use, but it's true). This doesn't have a lot of action but the reader can still tell that something had happened in the past (the image of red on the snow in St. Petersburg put an interesting image in my head). Regina seems like an interesting person. I can't tell what she's like exactly because it's so early in the story but I'm interested.

This story has powerful imagery and a simplicity that makes it all the more better to read. I'm very excited to see where this is going so I'll be subscribing and rec'ing! Great Job!

First off this layout is absolutely superb and I love how you've created the banner. Props to you because most people can't be bothered.

One
I like how short it is. It's a nice opener and really sets the feel of the story. It's very dreamlike, as though the narrator doesn't really believe what xir are saying. "And if that isn’t humanity, than this isn’t June and our lives aren’t falling apart." This is a sucker punch of a line and I can't think of a better way to end a chapter -- it entices the reader into reading more and sure did pull me along into the next chapter straight away!

But most of all I adore your description in this chapter. I'm a sucker for beautifully worded sentences and paragraphs and this has me swooning.

Two
Again, this description. I'm glad you didn't launch into a more action-based chapter in terms of writing style, and yet it still has a sense of urgency and something being off because something has happened. And I, as the reader, really want to find out this very second. Also, "between to teeth and" error of which "to/too/two" you used.

I love Regina's demeanour. How she's above everything else. I feel like you've created her to be not the nicest nor most liked character, what with your language choices. Of how the castle is insignificant to her, and the more trivial things matter the most to her. Without saying it outright, it also seems like she came from a wealthy family -- hence where she got her attitude -- and has lost it due to the war.

This is a beautiful piece with gorgeous imagery and stunning wording, and I commend you on it. You're creating an utterly unique world and I'd really love to stick around and see what happens to Regina.