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  • anotherteenwriter

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    @ hottestchocolate
    I don't mind at all I'll try and work on that next time. Thanks for reading and commenting!
    June 25th, 2014 at 08:46pm
  • hottestchocolate

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    Aww :) I liked it!

    I hope you don't mind a little constructive criticism though. A thing you could work on is giving the characters a little more depth but I certainly understand that's difficult for such a short story.

    But it was well-written and I liked all these 'shark attack' and 'I hope a sinkhole swallows me' remarks, they are funny :) And Zack is very cute aw! Good job!
    June 25th, 2014 at 12:15pm
  • anotherteenwriter

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    @ brxndneweyes thanks haha I thought it would make up for Alex leaving him in how I spent the end of my summer
    June 8th, 2014 at 09:20am
  • fifthghost

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    CUUUTE yay for happy zack
    June 8th, 2014 at 12:35am