More please?
June 19th, 2014 at 03:02am
Judging the posted chapters for this contest
First I have to say that I thought no-one was going to do one of Daryl and I loved that you did. Even though it is not completed and there is still one chapter left, I noticed the hints of pride that were shown in the first two and especially in Jenny. I can't deny that I wished I could have read it all to see what happens next in order to be more detail with the sin that you chose. The layout is simple yet beautiful which I liked very much.
You have a great writing style and you managed to described in vivid details what was happening in order to visualize more your story. I was literary biting my lower lip when I read the part where Rick gave Baby Judith to Lily. Lily seemed like she was lost and out of it which made me nervous. When I read that she had a heart attack and died I almost had one myself. It is good to scare me like this though because it meant that the vivid words you used made me feel like I was part of it and I loved that feeling. You did an amazing job and even though I'm judging the contest with only the two chapters, I can't wait to read what happens next and hopefully you are able to finish it because it is a very good story.
Thanks for joining my contest and good luck!
RP