Combined as One - Comments

Really like the story so far!! Hope you up-date again soon! =)

Your summary was great, it told me everything I needed to know about the story and got me excited to read it. I don't read many Avengers stories, but I love that you decided to do something really unique. Time travelling is a cool concept on its own, but using it to great a crazy super hero is just awesome.

Man, Groves is an ass. I like that we get to see his personality through his interactions with Deborah, and pretty much everyone else he interacts with. It's a lot more interesting than just telling about the type of person he is, you know? The way Olivia treated his was great, she just didn't care at all about what she said to him.

I'm only one chapter in, but I'm excited to see what happens with Colette and her interactions with the Avengers and all that. Great start so far!

Summary:
I absolutely loved what you did with the summary. At first glance, I thought it was a little too long and I was afraid you were giving away too much information, but once I read it I was so surprised and glad that you made it the way you did. This story definitely sounds interesting and I'm excited to see what's to come!

Prologue:
I feel bad for Deborah. I can't imagine working with a man like that; there's desperation and then there's cruelty and I just feel really bad for her.
I love your description with the time machine and how Groves felt like his skin was being peeled. It's something I haven't seen and I like what you did with it.
I honestly wonder how much has changed from 2011 to 2062 and I really hope you'll draw some attention to that.
Woah, I guess it doesn't really surprise me that Facebook doesn't exist anymore. I'm wondering what type of social networking they have in the future.
I love the way Olivia is treating him. It's kind of like karma for how he was treating Deborah.
Ugh, I hate the way Groves is treating the baby. What a jerk.

I'm definitely looking forward to what you have in store for this story! It's an amazing idea and I love the way you wrote the prologue. I didn't notice any mistakes in terms of spelling/grammar, so great job!

I just want to say that I'm already so into this story, just after reading the summary. Just by reading the summary (and the first part of the first chapter) I wonder why on earth he wants to create his own superhero? Is the world he lives in a bad place that needs someone that the people can trust and hope? Or does he want to use the super hero for evil things?

I love how much time skipped throughout the prologue. It was just scene after scene, action after action, making sure to get everything in the prologue without missing anything important. I really like how it skipped from him getting the interview to the battle; nothing in between would seem a little boring, or maybe not. But for the prologue, it didn't seem important and that's why I liked that skip between the two times.

The one thing I noticed in the first chapter was that you added links within the chapter. That's against the rules on Mibba, so I think it would be best to take them out or put the links in the authors notes so the reader can see them. They just can't be in the story content itself.

Ohh, they're in trouble for what they did! I was happy when it went back to them after introducing Lettie. I love her little scene because it focused on her daily life but also points out the characteristics of the Avengers that she inherited. I freaking loved how they were all cool with how she came into the world, and that they all wanted to meet her. I mean, I thought they would be a little mad, but no, they are happy that they all helped in making a child.

The concept of the story is very interesting and the story itself is very well written and you've really managed to capture all of the Avengers really well, even if from the chapters I read, they weren't really there. But, like I said, this story is very awesome. Good job!

I was so happy to see this updated. I really missed this story and can't wait to see what happens next. Update again soon!!

hope you update often. This appears to be pretty good so far

I'm glad your lappy is still alive! :3 I love this update!

Great update! And congratulations on the new computer, even though your old one got a virus. Very excited for these new updates!!

Yay!! You updated!:D very excited for more: P

WOO HOO!!! Awesome update!

hahaha yessss :3
great update!
can't wait for more

Awesome, as usual! Keep it up!!!

Yay! Finally an update!!

This is pretty cool! I'd love to read some more:D

More please!???
I love this so much!

Ahhh please update soon!!!

This is such an awesome story! I honestly can't get enough! Thanks for updating!

That last line killed me! At least we know now that she really does have Stark sarcasm!!!

Great start to the story and the storyline is really interesting I can't wait for more :)

This story sounds amazing from what I have read already! Please continue!