I really like it so far :) I can't wait for you to update next
June 17th, 2014 at 01:42am
I very much enjoy this piece. It is hard to carry a scene like this as naturally as you did. My favorite part of this 1st chapter is that you engaged the reader instantly and thoroughly. That is an important skill.
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-John