Temptress - Comments

Comment swap: I like the ambiance you have created. I always find it hard to write one shots and so I never do. The build up in this story is very good, the anticipation is great. I usually do not read sexual stories like this, but I must say it was well betrayed. You were wanting to make this more than a one shot? Will you be shifting the view to this watcher?

I really enjoyed it. Gotta say it would have been so much better as a two or three shot...

I'll say it was interesting, I enjoy supernatural stories, especially with demons and or fairies. I get that it was a one-shot so I'll let some of my curiosity go like why her family would send a demon after her to kill her, but in thr end it was a good story What it was. It's also given me some good ideas for my own story on a certain matter I've been trying to figure out for the longest so thank you. This was very good.