Coroniam City - Comments

Layout/Summary

I love the layout to this so much. It's beautiful and really fits your subject matter. The summary is short and sweet and makes me suer interested to see where you decide to take this!

Chapter one

Oh my this was intense. I really excited to see what exactly is causing them to up security. Oh my, it seems that there’s some sort of beast or something. That is really awesome! I love your writing style. It makes it really fun to read.

Chapter Two
Holy! This was amazing! You have wonderful details in this and it’s as if I’m in the story with Piper and her dad. That woman must have been terrifying. I’m still trying to figure out what exactly these creatures of the night are, and I love the bit of mystery. Okay so, I really love Roger already. Oh crap, the ending of this made my heart sink. I love this so far.

Chapter Three
Ooooh! I love how Piper is fighting back even though she may be scared. Stong female lead characters are my weakness. I love it. I really wanna know what exactly the virus is. OH SHIT! She bit him and now I’m freaking out. I don’t like Isaiah. I don’t trust him. I really hope Piper is okay! Oh crap, her dad pointing a gun at her really pulled at my heart string. This chapter was so full of twists and turns and I was not expecting any of that at all. I’m going to subscribe.

This story was amazing. (Sorry I didn’t get to chapter four, I’m fighting sleep typing this lol) I can’t wait to finish the next chapter and I look forward to an update! Great job!

1.) I wish you the best with your baby. I hope everything goes well and that it's perfectly healthy. ❤❤❤
2.) THANK YOU SO SO SO MUCH FOR UPDATING. I ABSOLUTELY ADORE THUS STORY!

Then end of chapter three was great. Just like a movie. I really can't wait to read more.

PLEASE UPDATE SOON I LOVE THIS SOOO MUCH

The third chapter was great! I was totally expecting someone infecting her. But when she infected herself my mind WAS BLOWN! I can't wait for more chapters to come out!

This is a great story. I love vampire stories and original fictions are the best because I can read the different aspects of the characters. This story is amazing. The whole concept of it makes it different and unique even though it is based on something that is not knew and known. You managed to create a whole different image of the typical vampire race which makes the story very interesting.

I like Piper. She is a very likable woman and now that she is a vampire I know she will be an interesting and more powerful character. You have a great writing style. This story so far is very well written. You managed to use powerful words and imagery to describe detailed scenarios and situations.

Every word drew me more and more in and I didn't want to stop reading.

I love the title. I love that it is set in a created place which makes the plot of the story stronger. The layout and the banner is simple and yet it first the story perfectly. Overall, I love everything related to this story. I can't wait to see where it goes.

Great job!

this was not at all what i expected! goddamn...

Before I get to the actual story, I just wanted to say that I absolutely love the layout!

Also, the character's name is one of my favorite names!

Anyway.

HOLY SHIT! This is spectacular! This is so different from a lot of the vampire stories I have read but that's what makes me love this even more. It's different from a lot of outbreak stories I've read. Usually they're about zombies but having a vampire outbreak is definitely interesting! After reading the three chapters you have so far, I'm wanting more. This had me at the edge of my seat and now I can't wait to see what happens! The relationship between Piper and her dad will definitely be an interesting one now.

Your use of words is amazing, making the imagery great. I feel like I'm watching a movie. Your characterization is great as well. I like how we're seeing Piper come through gradually instead of all of her coming at us during the first chapter.

This was my favorite line: Security's tightened around Coroniam but the night is theirs again, and this time, I'm not sure electricity is enough to stop them.

I'm rec'ing and subbing!

Hmm, I recommended and subscribed because I'm a sucker for vampire stories and this is just not exception.

I must say, two chapters in and I'm already itching for more. This is definitely different than your average vampire story because I never thought of it as an outbreak/war, so I really love that!

Also, your use of words is really nice and I love how easy it is to read and follow since sometimes war stories can be a little heavy but this is perfect!

Keep it up, please!

HOLY CRAP O.o

HOLY CRAP O.o

Wow, you have mad skills! I love how you put this all together. It's so badass! I loved every bit of action you had in here. And the way you put the cliffhangers in really keeps a person going. I want to read more! I can tell you put a lot of effort into this.

So I know this isn't really zombies, but what are they? Or are you going to make me find out?
(I'm subscribing regardless)

Holy Holy Holy Holy shit. I swear, and I'm not kidding, my eyes were fuckin' buggin' out of my head at the end of this chapter. Anytime I read or come across outbreaks and stuff, it's always about zombies, I never even thought about a vampire outbreak.

It's genius as fuck.

The guards seem compassionate but stern, which makes me glad for some odd reason.

I just love this, I truly do. Like, your words just flow, I could especially envision Piper and her dad fleeing to their car and in my head I could totally picture Piper's confused and scared face.

I'll give you a cookie and money to update this as soon as possible. I wouldn't be scared about posting this story at all.

Fucking ace, man.

Wow okay so this is good. Great actually.
I always have my reserves about vampires, werewolves, etc. Just because it takes a lot for people to be able to write it well without it becoming "cheesy" and you have done a fantastic job of not letting it become cheesy!

I really like your main character so far I can see bits and pieces of her come through. She seems compassionate but also there is a bit of a fire to her, and I like that. I think your descriptions were great it wasn't too much but it still really had me envision everything. I wish you would have gone into more description of Coroniam but I know that will be coming later!

Over all this was great. I am really excited for this actually and I am definitely going to be subscribing and recommending. You have some serious talent!

HOLY CRAP THIS IS SO GOOD! PLEASE KEEP GOING!