August 5th, 2014 at 03:09am
I will never get over how amazing your descriptions are. Just. Oh wow, this was amazing and I love the world you created. As always, you gave me a clear picture of everything, how dark and intense the atmosphere was and how it most certainly not a happy place. Already from the first paragraph you can just feel how scary and hopeless the situation was, especially in that last sentence of the paragraph.
I like how you showed Daisy and Robert's relationship through their actions and thoughts, like how they held hands to stay together and her observation of his tangled hair. I don't know, I just really liked that part because just that little detail of her trying to fix his hair showed how she cared for him and how close they were.
But oh god when they started running and all that shit, I kept leaning in closer to the screen because it's so terrifying and chaotic. I seriously wanted to scream with her because whatever's going on is bad, it's all bad and I just want them to run away and escape all the horror. RUN GUYS, RUN FOR YOUR LIVES.
THEY SHOT A CHILD. And reading that he was calling out for his mother made me lose it because at seeing a young child get shot shows how awful and ruthless these people are. WHY WOULD YOU SHOOT A CHILD HOW COULD YOU, OH LORD.
AND THEN DAISY GETS SHOT AND I DON'T KNOW WHAT TO DO WITH MYSELF AT THIS POINT. LIKE NO, WHY. THIS IS HURTING ME SO BAD. IT'S ALMOST LIKE I GOT SHOT.
“What can I do?” This line broke my heart. That hurt a lot because Robert's panicking and knows that no matter what he does, he can't really save her and she knows she's not going to last, so the only thing she asks is for him to stay. And as much as he wishes he could stay with her, he knows he can't and it's so tragic because he doesn't want to die and to be honest, I also feel like he doesn't want to die in front of her. I feel he wants to keep going because that's what she would want, so he tries to stay alive for the both of them.
BUT THEN HE GETS SHOT, TOO. MORE HURT. WELL, THERE GOES MY HEART. GOODBYE FRIENDS. Though she's not really sure because she's slowly slipping away and she doesn't want to think it's him, but deep down inside knows it is. I had a feeling this was going to happen. As I stated before, you portrayed this whole situation as dark and hopeless, so something bad was definitely going to go down. I WAS STILL NOT READY.
This blew me away, seriously. I loved it and it was beautiful like everything you do.
This was absolutely amazingly written. Your writing style is so captivating I love it.