My Empire of Dirt - Comments

This is really interesting! I like the concept of the character having memory loss in the middle of a nuclear apocalypse, it makes everything more suspenseful, in a way. It's also really cool to read because we have no idea who the character is either, so we're learning along with them.

I really enjoyed the way you started the first chapter, it really set the mood well for the rest of the story. With the second chapter, I think it started out well as well. Once Parker (maybe? ) got to the house, it seemed like the little girl let them in quickly considering she's 11 and a strange person showed up at her house while her parents were gone, if that makes sense.

But yes! I like that you got inspired from watching The 100 (such a good show!!) and I can't wait to see where you go with this

This is incredibly fascinating - it's such a unique place to begin! I found myself searching my brain for reasons as to why our hero wouldn't know who he was. But I love the concept of his memory loss, and the vague acceptance of the fact that he may, or may not, be Parker.

I think Sophie is an interesting character, but I don't quite trust her yet. She seems sweet, but I feel at odds with my own instinct to see innocence in a young child, as I read the dialogue and action and find myself imagining something much more sinister.

Overall, I'm looking forward to seeing more of this! I quite love your concept, and I think the motivation of human survival is such a powerful stake to place on a story. You have to have real chops for that... So I am so excited to read on! Great job. :)

this story got me hooked. it's very interesting and the mystique of the plot and how our heroine got there is intriguing the little girl is creepy and cute at the same time. she shows how others have been affected by the nuclear attack. it also makes me want to check out the 100 I had seen it on Netflix but never really felt an urge to watch it until now. im going to subscribe and recommend it and I hope you update soon cause as I said before, im hooked like trout