Okay, I'll admit it: I'm not one who usually comments, but I just find your writing and this story so engaging. I am soooo excited for what's to come between Laura and Nathan in the upcoming chapters!
@ coralreefs; Thanks for the feedback! I understand your perspective, so I will clarify this depiction of Laurena. Laurena's inner thoughts are satiric in nature, meant more for dark humor within society's depiction of what it means to be a successful, attractive woman, rather than a solid perception of Claudia; at this point, she has no credible opinion of her other than she's attractive and married to the object of fantasies. Keeping this in mind, I have chosen to portray her as "immature" or as a modern teenager (naive, inexperienced, unaware and all) so this may be why she comes across this way. I will state though, she is in no shape or form meant to be depicted as having internalized misogyny. Insecurity in herself and her own sexuality? Absolutely. Laurena has a lot of growing up to do and I cannot wait to share her growth with you all! :)
Interesting story, very well written!!! However, I noticed in the author's note of the first chapter, you requested constructive criticism. My personal critique is the way Laurena views Claudia - it's a little anti-woman. Just because she has a crush on Nathan, she describes his wife as a "bimbo-blonde model wife" with no substance to her character other than her beauty. It is mentioned a couple of times that Claudia is a lawyer, but its mainly her good-looks that kind of overtake the description of her character. Idk, it just rubbed me the wrong way...makes Laurena seem like she has internalized misogyny. Anyways I like the story a lot! Your writing is very enticing and I can't wait to read more. Please update soon :)
I love it so far! I feel like everyone has their secrets and I can't wait to find out what. Also, I'm paranoid that her teacher for her law classes might end up being Nathan D: