The Moth Diaries - Comments

Hey there, ol' chap! I've missed this story so much!

I love you're style. The descriptors are perfect for the situation here: clinging with your fingertips and nails and shallow breaths to the glass of a window that overlooks his fading footprints. This line sent chills down my back. Oh how painfully familiar this all is, watching how the security is taken away. He erased you when he left. My heart, dear. My fragile human heart. Again, the familiarity cuts me to the core.

I love how short and sour this chapter is. It shows just how talented a writer you are. I can't wait to see where you go with this. Please know, I'll be here for you and the story. Take care, and keep up the phenomenal writing!

I really like the narration on this, how it's told in second person. There aren't too many writers who like to face that challenge. When you do encounter it, it's normally those "Choose your own ending books". But I'm not comparing your writing to these books at all. This has got a great flow to it, and I love the way you keep it short and sweet. You represent larger issues within these 300-ish word chapters that you can apply to the world. So I think that in itself is a great accomplishment. Keep up the great work on this. It's so intriguing.