Sorry it took me so long to get around to reading this!
So, I really like your plot. The intricacies of the group's relationship, and the secrets they keep from each other, is a good basis for a story and you do a great job of showing just how complicated and seedy the group is underneath their pretences.
In terms of your writing, there are a couple of little mistakes, nothing that a quick read over wouldn't fix. I think using italics instead of bold would work better when a character is emphasising something, but overall your writing is good.
Great story, and I can't wait to read more. This story has such great potential!
So, I really like your plot. The intricacies of the group's relationship, and the secrets they keep from each other, is a good basis for a story and you do a great job of showing just how complicated and seedy the group is underneath their pretences.
In terms of your writing, there are a couple of little mistakes, nothing that a quick read over wouldn't fix. I think using italics instead of bold would work better when a character is emphasising something, but overall your writing is good.
Great story, and I can't wait to read more. This story has such great potential!