The Taste of Bells - Comments

Oh god, oh god, oh god. I knew I was doomed the moment you entered the contest because I've been in love with everything you've done for months upon months and now that I've read it and it's finished, I have the undeniable and overwhelming urge to cry. You have doomed me and now my heart is utterly shattered. I am undoubtedly emotional right now. (It also took me two hours to do this comment.)

So excuse me while I try to form a coherent comment.

First off, I love that this was saffic. It was different and wonderfully done, and it was absolutely beautiful. I also love how you incorporated the snapchat you picked into the story in such a sad, gut-wrenching way. I was utterly enamored with Chloe, with Jade, with their relationship (or rather, lack thereof) because the way you wrote this reeled me in immediately; I didn't have to force myself to read the beginning before it picked up steam and there wasn't a specific moment that caught my interest, it just happened from the first sentence and it flowed gorgeously without a single flaw. I was fascinated, I was curious, and now I'm heartbroken.

Chloe's internal monologue and emotions rattled me entirely, and I felt every moment of hopelessness. I felt the pain and oh god, was I angry when Jade did what she did at the end. I wish I could even begin to explain the tornado of emotions this story inflicted on me but I literally can't. I've typed, erased, typed again just to erase once more, and I'm accepting that I just can't explain to you what I feel. (Some writer I am, pfft.) I'm angry, I'm sad, I'm in agonizing longing, I'm heartbroken, I'm sympathizing and empathizing with Chloe. You wrote this so damn well that I can't wash myself of Chloe's feelings. I tried before I wrote this comment but you have no idea how much this story rattled me and got under my skin. It's going to stay with me probably for the rest of my life. I'm going to remember this story years from now and feel the same pang, the same nauseating heartbreak and despair that I'm walking away with. For that, I bow to you.

I don't think you understand just how talented you are because I looked for something, I'll admit that. I looked for something wrong with this story because this comment was supposed to be a judgment for the contest, but I'm coming up empty handed and I don't even know what to do with myself so all I can say now is thank you so damn much for being on Mibba and if you ever publish a book, you have my money 100% because you are so talented. Basically, thanks for existing and sharing with the internet, yes.

178/10. I'm going to go back to crying now, bye.

This is an unbelievably well-written story. It leaves me hanging on every word. While I'm partially sad that this is only a three-part work, I think that it's also perfect. Any more and my heart might just burst out of my chest. The only very minor suggestion I would have is that the letter coloring is slightly difficult to read (you might wish to darken future fonts a tiny bit). You're an absolutely fantastic writer, and I will definitely be reading more of your works in the very near future ("27" definitely caught my eye). I'll definitely be recommending this to all my friends, and I think you could definitely go places with your writing. Best wishes!

God. GOD. I have no words except that this is sensational

This... I don't think I have the right words. But you manage to reflect how crude the real world is, and that was amazing. You're an amazing writer.

Man the feels...Still in love with your writing, great job!!

You updated! This is so great! I can't wait to see how this plays out. I'm not expecting a happy ending (I'm not even sure if I want one) but I can tell it'll be awesome. Also, the way you write? Amazing. Keep it up.

This is really good so far, the church part turned me off but I got back on when she was almost sarcastic if you will. If you continue to write this I'll totally come back to read the rest!

This is really good. It feels so real, and totally relatable. Keep writing.

Um, wow. That was amazing. You had me totally hanging onto every word. You've got a reader in me.

I'm absolutely hooked! There's something about your diction that just reels me in, and I especially like the cross necklace paradox, and the fact that you're using zero clichés, despite this being a semi-love story. It's all around crazy original and well-written. I can't wait to read the next chapter!

@ bona drag
you make me blush

she does it again...she makes me swoon over her words

This is so endearing.

This is so endearing.