May 21st, 2008 at 02:37pm
other lines.
but isn't "fourth" more interesting? :cute:
:shifty
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Catch Me a Star - Comments
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May 21st, 2008 at 11:31am
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Fourth fave? What was first, second, and third faves?May 21st, 2008 at 11:27am
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'ts not pathetic.
fourth fav line;
"I brought you something," he presented his hands cupped together, "A star," they were empty. But not quite. The glow in Brendon's eyes was enough. Ryan fell into his arms and cried.May 21st, 2008 at 11:26am -
I cried writing it.
I'm kinda pathetic.
thanks for the comment.May 21st, 2008 at 11:16am -
So I've re-written this about nine times now and I figure that since I don't exactly know what I want to say, it's more of an ego thing - the desire to let the world know that I read it.
-sigh-
You are such an *amazing* writer.
That was a ... beautiful and painful and tragic and delicate and - painful thing to write of.
Done in a beautiful and painful and tragic and delicate way.
I think I cry too much reading stories on here. Or maybe in general.May 21st, 2008 at 11:05am -
I miss writing like this.
I'm proud of it.
Feedback = <33May 21st, 2008 at 09:51am
"It isn't a big deal," he'd shake his head, tufts of mischievous hair dangling in his eyes, "It's probably benign."
"And if it isn't?"
"Then, well, I'm going to die."
"How can you be so calm about it?"
"We all die."
That's why, the way Ryan just doesn't care. The way he thinks it's so simple and accepts it so easily. It made me just want to shake him until he understands. I hate him for the simplistic way he looked at such a gravitational situation.. but then I love him for it too.
The characterisation is brilliant, I really felt for both Brendon and Ryan as they struggled to deal with the cancer and it's outcome.
The ending was perfect, simple, emotional and clean.
All in all, loved it- just like I said the first time I read it. :cute: