It was not cliche it was down right amazing. So beautiful. And it was the ending of a story so youneed it to be romantic. I loved the snippets of Ashlee Simpson in the beginning ^^ I was actually just listening to that song a few moments ago. But, anyways; the ending almost had me in tears. :D You should be very proud of this story!
I must admit. I am insanely jealous of how amazing your writing is. I'm at a loss of words. I know you said you wanted feedback; but.....I just can't think of anything to tell you to improve your writing. Wow is all I can say.
I think its really nice how everything's coming together for Evie, in the sense that all these people are being really kind to her and the like. :cute:
Grr at Bella though - still :grr: at her!
The bit written with Andrew was also really stunning. I loved the line "He never wrote in black. It was a color that looked too harsh on paper."
Where do you come up with these amazing sentences? :cheese:
The descriptions are perfect, the part was perfect and I'm gutted the next part is going to be the last!
This was one of the saddest chapters of this story because of how heart broken Andrew and Evie really are. It also shows how each of them deal with the heart break differently. It really shines a light on just how in love Evie really was with Andrew that she had tried to demolish every single line she's ever written because she knew they were for Andrew.
But, I was in awe. It may be a very sad chapter but, it was just so beautiful, literature wise. I mean, my god woman. The words you are able to put down on paper or...word document; it's just.....amazing.
You should be happy with this part, because it was fucking amazing!
This story is my absolute favourite of yours - and is also my favourite story on mibba :con:
I can really feel Evie's emotions, and its quite symbolic, because of the line that said "Evie never showed such feelings, she only wrote about them, convinced that real people never felt like this"
I also love how together her family must be - the angry father symbolises it all.
It almost made me cry when Evie chucked all her stuff onto the bonfire
It's because you know how much it all meant to her and shes just throwing it away because Andrew's hurt her.
The last line was really poignant - you can see that Andrew really cares for her.
It was so sad, but at the same time the description was so vivid and it really took me into the story.
I loved the definition of hysteria at the start of it, and the fact that the emotions get tenser and tenser throughout the whole part, until the end of it where all hell breaks loose.
I also love this description: ...with anger lining the corners of her mouth, that were when she was in the presence of Andrew usually turned up in a heartfelt smile. But not today. Today things were different.
Wow, Nina.
This part was amazing.
I love this story. A lot. Now you must update soon!
I HATE BELLA!!!!! Grrrr. But, it was amazing, as always. God, the way you are able to draw out and sketch up diverse characters in each of your stories just goes over my head. What I like about your characters is that they all have pressure points and weak spots but, they also have such charismatic traits as well which makes you fall in love with them, it makes it seem like they're actual people. Kudos, Nina :D
Awwwww I think I yelled a big NOOOOOOOOOOO when I was reading this. DARN BELLA! I seriously hope everything is going to work out. Keep up the good work. :D
You are utterly amazing.
One of the best Andrew fics I've ever read.