This is an absolutely brilliant and well-rounded story, up to where you've published. The main character is gripping and so completely me. You're an excellent writer, and I'm looking forward to whatever comes next. I especially like that you've run the balance between not swearing overly much, and yet still giving yourself and your characters freedom of expression using it. Very well done. My only slight constructive criticism would be to read your chapters out-loud to yourself, or get a friend to proof-read. There's nothing big, just a spelling mistake here and there. I really do you hope continue, because I think this is amazing! Best wishes!
October 1st, 2014 at 10:53pm
