Video Star - Comments

I'm glad you included the wedding. I love a happy ending! I loved this story xxx

@ AJ9
You're welcome :)

@ Winter_Death
Ok, yeah. Thanks

@ AJ9
I'll try to add one more chapter, hows that? Also, the prequel to Scream Scream Scream is coming along nicely

End?? . I loved this chapter though cos it was really happy. You really should think about a sequel to this. Please?

I'm so sorry I haven't commented lately but I've been busy. I can't speak for everyone else but I'm definitely not bored and hope you continue this. I'm looking forward to reading more. Im up to date now and really enjoying it. Please update again soon. Xxx

Poor Echo! She's really been through it. Thank god she's got all the guys to help her. Please update again soon. xxx

Still loving this! Looking forward to reading more about the tour. Update again soon xx

That was not boring! I love the dynamic between Echo and Brian. Please update again soon. xxx

Great update please update again soon xx

Loving this and hope you can update again soon. xxx

@ fairjer0620
No need to be sorry I totally get it. She's supposed to be loosely based on me but just like the iTunes playlist she gives and all the people she lost in such a short time, that actually happened to me. But I under what you're saying and I'll definitely work on doing that. Also, you should re-visit your story and see if anything comes to mind. I have to do that a lot because I'm working one at least 6 other fan fictions and one original fiction plus all the fan fiction ideas floating around in my head so sometimes I'll only work on one or two stories at a time. Like with my M. Shadows one shot, I'm working on the prequel to it while I'm working on this story.

@ Winter_Death
I understand. It's hard because you want to please everyone, but some people just can't be pleased at all. And then one person can ruin the writing experience completely. I started and posted a Matt Sanders daddy story and only put up 2 chapters because after I put up the second chapter someone posted the most negative comment I just lost my inspiration. And it wasn't even about how I write, it was calling my story one of those cliché ones that have the sister/best friend of the main character end up with a band member because of the main character/band member's relationship. And the sad part is, I hadn't even gotten into the plot enough to have a relationship (romantic or otherwise) form between any of the main characters in the first place!

Anyway, I'm simply saying I understand.

I think you do a wonderful job balancing everything, and I think it would be lovely to read more details (how Echo looks, feels, what she's thinking or doing, etc.) Sometimes, when I read through her talking on her vlogs or doing a q&a session I feel like the video she is making would be only a minute long just because of how the conversation flows. Like, I read it as if she's speeding through the process because she feels like it is a well hated homework assignment and she simply wants to get it done. You get what I mean? That is where more detail could come in. What is she thinking when she reads a question? Could She do more to interact with her audience by joking around while she reads an amusing question? You've made her a YouTube star, so I have to believe that she loves what she does and loves her fans enough to give more than one sentence answers like a monotone robot, right?

I feel like she's an emotional character, and she's been through a lot in her young Life that has been not only tragic but has probably done a lot to build her character to make her who she is today. I'd love to read that emotion. To hear from her thoughts what it took for her to learn from these past experiences and grow from them. What is her current emotional state of mind after a recent escape from a physically, sexually, and verbally abusive relationship? How do those fears factor into the new relationship she is forming with Brian?

Writing a first person narrative can incredibly fun and emotionally taxing because you feel like you see a lot of yourself in your character. And it's your chance to be so descriptive when it comes to her story because SHE is telling it.

Anyway, I'm sorry, I'm a teacher so this is my nature really.

@ fairjer0620
Ok great! I'm so glad their still together :) and yes I know I do that lol I've been trying to break the habit but when I put everything the character does people say its to descriptive because they have the outfits, that I take hours on by the way. Sometimes days putting together. And they say say that they don't need every detail

The best source for the answers to these kinds of questions (about Brian and Michelle) are through his dad. Papa Gates had a Facebook and Twitter page. However, I'm pretty sure that rumor is 100% false. People have been putting them through divorce since the day they got married, I personally think it's pathetic and insane how invested in trashing the girls some fan girls really are. The last comment I saw from Papa Gates on Facebook about his kids was that they had a birthday party for McKenna and his (quote) 2 beautiful daughters in law who are way too good for his sons (unquote) were there. That was in August and, by all accounts according to him, Syn is very happily married and very on love with his wife (said to a fan who told Papa Gates to tell Syn to divorce Michelle so he could marry her instead (crazy bitch, right?!)).

Anyway, I love this story, it has a great plot and the relationships you've developed between everyone are great. One constructive bit of criticism, if I may? The way it reads seems kind of stunted. I feel like I'm trying to go back and draw my own more descriptive sentences because of your tendency to simply list things. "I did this, and then this, and then this,..." etc. I hope my words don't discourage you, I do love this story and the idea, and I know it's hard to put yourself and your work out there like this.

Please, continue to share your imaginings with everyone!

That was great! I'm glad they're taking things slow for the time being.

I hope the rumours about brian and Michelle aren't true .

Please update again soon xxx

What a great update! I hope her tour goes well. Please update again soon xx

Aww, Brian is such a gent. I loved this chapter and I can't wait for more so I hope you will update again very soon. Xxxx

Aww, Brian's shy. That's just too cute

Please update again soon. Xxx