The Journey Begins - Comments

This is really interesting so far and I'm excited to read more!!

Okay, WHAT. Why have I not seen this story until you commented on my candy bowl?! I absolutely love the Doctor and Rose. Literally to the point where I was so sad when Billie Piper ended her stint as his companion and I didn't watch until she guest starred and got her happy ending with the duplicate Doctor.

ANYWAY. I loved the beginning part, how you picked up right after they were brought together. The awkwardness between them was so cute, and I could picture it perfectly, because that's just like the Doctor. I also really liked how you did the transition into a month later. It fit really well how you ended the scene and began the next one.

I really can't wait to see where you go with this story. I'm definitely subscribing and recommending!

This is quite a lengthy chapter, but it flows together perfectly. There is no awkwardness, I didn't catch any mistakes, spelling or grammar, and your descriptions are spot on. I'm not a fan of Doctor Who, so I'm not inclined to subscribe, but I don't doubt that those who are fans will love whatever it is you come up with.

One thing I did like though, was the transition to one month later. You did it with ease. Also, the cliffhanger is perfect.

Keep up the good work!

So I don't actually know a thing about Doctor Who, but it didn't really seem to matter while I was reading this. Though the chapter was a bit lengthy, I didn't have to keep stoping to wonder what anything was, save the Tardis bit. Even though I don't know anything previously, I really like Rose. She just seems like a very firm sort of character and she reminds me of my mother in that way.

I particularly like what you did towards the end, when it says, "And then he pulled.

But the doors didn't move an inch.

They didn't even rattle."

I love how you separate these into paragraphs and make them short and abrupt. It made me anxious and I was like oh shit why didn't they move at all what is this?! So definitely good on that.

Overall, this was not a bad read in the slightest, even for me who is totally lost on Doctor Who. Glad my candy bowl brought me hear, darling.

I will be honest that I have only seen Doctor Who like one time and was only a part of the episode. I think that the summary is interesting and able to get you hooked to the story, although I have no idea what a Tardis is.

I really like the conversations between the characters it seems to be kind of natural, you know? I even like that you added Mum in there even though I'm used to seeing Mom. (British slang isn't something I'm familiar with, but I know that.)

I really like the details that you put into the story. It really paints an image to follow with which is something that I love. I love stories with really good descriptions, and this story is one of them.

Anyways, I think the story is interesting, and I'm kind of able to read it as an original since I know nothing about Doctor Who. I think that is really cool that you can do that with a story.

I got here for the swap! :) Apologies for taking a while.

I normally don't read Dr Who stuff, in fact this will only be the second one I've ever read!

You provide extremely good imagery, this is especially noticeable where you are describing the hotel room. Reading that paragraph, I can get a clear picture in my mind of the room and placement, which allows me to sort of watch the character's as I'm reading it. I love it when an author can do that in stories!

I really enjoyed how you started the second part of the chapter after the time lapse, "A normal life my arse", that part in particular made me giggle.

Her feelings are well explained through out, I feel like I do have a small understanding of the amount of trouble she is having figuring out what is going on now and if anything is the same anymore.

The banter is hilarious - Even without an extensive knowledge of the show it just seems to fit their characters.

A very good cliffhanger as well!

Over all, I enjoyed reading this. Your writing flow is great and of course your grammar is absolutely amazing. I reckon you'll have more readers on this in no time, there is a pretty big Dr Who fan club on here, so just keep advertising this piece and you'll have more subscribers in no time! One of the best written stories I've read on here to be honest, Keep it up!

omg I love the Doctor and Rose! Literally at the end of series 2, I cried like a baby and stopped watching it for so long. But this is really cute! I was so excited when Meta-Crisis Doctor appeared because it gave my shipper heart a reason to finally be happy (but also sad for the real doctor). Anywho, the only problem I think is the formatting. Everything is just jumbled together instead of having spacing (and honestly, I don't mind it as much, but there's some people on here that literally report people for things like this and I don't want you to get in trouble!!), but other than that, great job!

This is really good, it's been a while since I've actually read a Doctor who Fanfic, and the fact that it's The Doctor and Rose made it even more appealing to me... I love the way they interact, and the story overall is awesome :)

I have to say this is really good. You are an amazing writer and this is an amazing story!

I know you said ignore the layout, but if you make the content wall smaller (maybe 400) to fit your banner I think the layout will be perfect (oh and move the subtitle down so it doesn't rest on the banner too)

Okay, enough about that now on to the chapter: First, it took me a long minute to figure out this is a Dr. Who fic just because I've never seen the show (please don't shoot me!) Second you have really great grammar. The banter between Rose and the Doctor is so cute, and sweet in the first part. You really did great with that. I like the adventure they went through in the second half. With the shaft falling/being exploded. And the ending was great. He can't open the wardrobe then falls in... :)

I think the Doctor Who fandom is going to go crazy over this. :)