Lullaby for a Sadist - Comments

@ Don'tFearTheReaper
Why, thank you!

Can I just say, holy shit!
The way that you set this up is just perfect.
My heart completely fell.
I'm still reeling from this.

"He came to" was correct without "consciousness".
But if you do want it the way it is currently, that's all right, too.
Aside from that, I really enjoyed this.
I would love for something like this to be entered in my contest.

@ Tipsy Returns
Thank you! Also, I hadn't quite figured out what I wanted the main character to be, so I was keeping it neutral. Thank you for pointing out the errors, too! I've never written anything in third person limited, and I've only just began writing again, so again, thank you! I'm very glad you enjoyed it:)

Hey! I'm here to judge the contest.

Content
This was terrific. Nothing like I've ever read before. It had powerful dialogue, and amazing execution. It was almost horrifying as to what was taking place. I admire you for having portrayed madness so well. I also really liked the summary, and the truth of it. For once I was confused, whether I agreed with the character or not. Wonderfully done.

Errors
There were a few minor mistakes that I noticed.
1. "It was almost pitable how easy this was going to be;" The 'pitiable' is spelled wrong here.
2. "He came to a few hours later, and I watched as he looked around in confusion, trying to get out of the ropes." I think you forgot to write 'consciousness' after 'came to'.
3. "He was unconscious, and the pack of cigarettes on the table had been tempting me for a while, so I grabbed them and a lighter, making sure the bonds were as infallible as they had been before walking up the stairs, locking the heavy oak door, and stepping out for a smoke." There should be a comma after 'infallible as they had been'.

Overall
Very strong one shot. Very nicely written. The only little complaint I have though is regarding the main characters past. What did the man being killed do? Human trafficking? Or smuggling? I was expecting to know. But the main guy/girl's (another thing, I never found out if the killer was male or female) madness covers it up.
Besides that, I'm extremely happy that you chose to write this. Brilliant work. Keep it up!