Lunch on a Skyscraper - Comments

  • Tipsy.

    Tipsy. (100)

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    NaNoWriMo 2015
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    Age:
    28
    Location:
    India
    Hey! I'm here to judge the contest. Cute

    Content
    Such a beautiful piece. This is one of the most unique one shots I've read on here. I'm glad you touched such a sensitive subject, that was a problem in the past, and still is in some nations. Amazing writing and portrayal. The imagery was perfect too. Brilliant work.

    Errors
    None. I'm surprised, because I seem to find errors somehow. This was simply perfect.

    Overall
    I really loved the blunt narration and the perfection of it. Your writing is wonderful and I really enjoyed reading this short, simple, yet powerful piece. Keep up the excellent work!

    Cute
    September 24th, 2014 at 07:18am