Geraldine - Comments

Lmao. I about fell to the floor laughing.
This is hilarious and well written so far.
Continue please :]

Ahahahahahaha, that's brilliant! :D

Story review;

Laceration Gravity:

Claimed =] I want to read this :cute:

EDIT: I read the first part of the oneshot. The beginning was different, which isn't neccesarily a bad thing. I usually read stories where Gerard sits up from a hangover, or his emotions or wellbeing is described first. But Gerard woke up on a Saturday morning feeling the same as he always did. Sounds more like a fairy tale. A tale you'd read to children more than some sex addict story or something. It's different, and I liked it.

I think you're going for a different angle with your writing in this story. You've repeated the word "Gerard" a lot in the first few paragraphs, and it has a kind of numbing effect, like everything should be ok in "Gerard" world, as it's quite simple. Suggesting some comedic doom mewonders?

"HOLY SHIT!" Well that sums it all up really doesn't it :tehe: Somethings gone wrong... You could exchange the capitals for italics or bold here though...

Mikey was enjoying his routine Saturday morning lie-in, during which he daydreamt about girls, one day being a rockstar, breaking the world record for eating the world's largest baguette and girls. :tehe: I really like this line. It reminds me of my friend who's a typical boy. You've described a typical boy really well here, and added some humour into the story already.

"I HAVE BOOBS!" She screamed rushing into the middle of the room and staring at her breasts in the mirror mounted on Mikey's wall. :lmfao :lmfao :lmfao Brilliant, is that Gerard?! This is an extremely original plotline to me. I love it so far. The only criticism I'd have is that you could substitute the capitals for a bbcode.

A topless girl was standing in the middle of his bedroom, wearing boxer shorts, screaming about her lack of a penis. :lmfao You have a knack of making things descriptive and yet still funny. I love that. :cute:

Mikey nodded, his face still a sickly shade of pink. :tehe: I love this story. And I didn't see any grammar mistakes. Well done =]

:lmfao

I would so leave a review if I weren't half asleep and laughing so hard.

:lmfao

Dude, you just totally made me choke on my coffee! That is the funniest thing I've read in a long time

He pushed the duvet away, swung his legs over his bed and lifted his eyelids to check himself out in the mirror, just like he normally did every single morning. :lmfao

That made me laugh insanely, I bet he totally does that every morning.

And I don't want to put a top on. I like my naked lady body. I've got great boobs. :lmfao

You rock!!!
I hope you can put the next part up soon!!!
It's amazing!

.... Oh my god :shock
I can't believe you actually wrote one of those.
I CAN'T STOP LAUGHING!
Flippin' brilliant, I want more :tehe:

CLAIMED! :tehe: That was hilarious, dear!

Okay, first off, BRAVO

Despite the title, I DID NOT see that coming. 'Cause it started off all serious and stuff and then it went CRASH!

That was probably the most entertaining and interesting story I've read in a long while :tehe: I'm still giggling my ass off here!

THIS was how I reacted when I was reading through your story...

He pushed the duvet away, swung his legs over his bed and lifted his eyelids to check himself out in the mirror, just like he normally did every single morning. However, Gerard didn't look as... Gerard-ish as he did on every other morning.

Oh no she didn't.... Don't tell she turned him into a -

"I HAVE BOOBS!" She screamed rushing into the middle of the room and staring at her breasts in the mirror mounted on Mikey's wall. "OH CRAP, MIKEY, I HAVE BOOBS!"

I pretty much fell off my swirley chair laughing :file: But I'm alright, no serious injuries. I like this story a lot.

I didn't see any typos or bad grammar, very good.

"That time you wet yourself last year (Mikey turned magenta). I swore I'd never tell anyone because if I did, you'd tell the love of my life, Isabelle Ross, that I watch her get dressed. Proof enough?" When I read that line I went, HOLY SHIT, HE'S STRAIGHT?!?!. And that only made me interested more.

Update soon? ;;P

:lmfao Great goody goodness! I love it! It's so hilarious! Get that next chapter out soon or I will be a very sad little girl and I will cry myself dry!