omg i loved this. i adore all the ideas you incorporated and the style was very different from anything i've read before. i love the various twists and all the sarcasm; it was so fun! i think there were some areas where the wording and grammar could be worked on, but overall this was really good. i really enjoyed reading it!!
Aw thank you so much! I'm really glad you liked it! I'll go over it later today and fix those :D