The Dark Wolf and the Dark Fox - Comments

I will be updating extremely soon and thank you

are you going to update? i like it.

@ Alex Moore.
Thank you so much!! I hope you continue to read as I update more. Thank you for the criticism, I'll go over it after I've finished writing my story. I'm so glad you enjoyed my story

@ lionheart.
Thank you :D

@ lionheart.
I'm dyslexic so my spelling and grammar usually is a little of, I usually go through my grammar and spelling after I've written the whole story :)

I really like where this is starting off, I mean he is tied up and held. What is going on? Having those questions as a reader in the beginning of a story is always good. (little citicism; check the grammar, these little faults can really degrade the fun of reading this and they are easily rid of. I make these mistakes all the time being a Dutch girl, I understand)

Oh I love the sentence: His wolf snapped and growled in its mental cage, wanting to be finally rid of its chains.

Stalking its prey: You use a lot of 'The wolf' try swapping it with he, or it maybe. Other than that, great chapter. I am used to writing lenghty chapters but I now really enjoy the lenght of yours.

Haha too find out he was just dreaming of eating stiles is a huge relief. I am so glad that witty awesome and beautiful boy is not dead.

I really like the mystery and the questions, I mean what is wrong with him?! Keep that going, it keeps readers interested.

Overall a good story. It could use some editting but that is all. (nitpicking (A) )

Pretty good so far, it has potential to be a good story. The only thing that I can critique is of course the proofreading. You tend to use a lot of commas which creates run on sentences, making them longer than they should be. There's also spelling errors, but that's an easy fix. Other wise you'll get comments nagging about the spelling & punctuation haha. All in all it's a good read, update soon :)

I will be proof reading it soon, not yet I've only commented on one blog, so I'll be doing more soon, thank you :D

@ Lucey
Haha I totally get the feeling. I was ecstatic when I got my first comment too. Are the candy bowl thingy working? Also, I suggest that you proofread this work, since it has few errors, which might be turning off readers. Besides that, you really are a great writer.

@ Tipsy Returns
Thank you so much!! Alpha is a leader of the pack, Beta is a member of a pack (Scott's pack) Anything you don't understand later on in the chapters comment and I'll tell you about it :) My first comment, thank you for being my first comment. I'm overjoyed :D (Reply button) :)

Thank you so much!! Alpha is a leader of the pack, Beta is a member of a pack (Scott's pack) Anything you don't understand later on in the chapters comment and I'll tell you about it :) My first comment, thank you for being my first comment. I'm overjoyed :D

Hey there!
So, I read this story, and I'm confused why it hasn't had any response yet. I mean, it is so well written! I've never watched Teen Wolf, and I have no idea of the characters' background (or what Alpha and Beta are, for that matter ) but this can so easily be read as an original fiction.
Your description is really good, and I think Scott's wildness has something to do with the lady in chapter 1. Keep up the great work and update soon! Definitely recommending and subscribing!